What To Say

[lady_bracknell]

Title: What to Say
Author: shimotsuki
Format and Word Count: Ficlet, 897
Rating: G
Prompt: "Say Yes"
Summary: Remus worries that Tonks might have grand expectations.
Author's note: The Donne poem Remus has chosen is "Love's Growth."
Genre: Romantic comedy

Comments

[scarlett71177]

What a lovely, tender piece.

I like the little details in this piece- you've done a great job with showing the vibrance and excitement of a new romance.

Well done!

Amy

[shimotsuki]

Thanks for the encouraging comments -- I'm glad to hear you liked it.

[fantasticjackie]

Aww! This was so adorable and sweet! I have my daily dose of the warm fuzzies from this one. =D

I love the discussion at the beginning. :) It's cool how they know about muggle historical and literary figures.

Oh, I just love the last line of this. ^_^ Or paragraph, rather. ;) It's really sweet; made me smile.

[shimotsuki]

Thanks! Remus seems like the type to know about Muggle history, and maybe Tonks's dad would've turned her onto Muggle literature.

[godricgal]

I think this is lovely, and a wonderful use of the prompt.

What struck me the most was your characterisation of Tonks, and the little actions you threw in that seems to fit her so very well; particularly the image of her swinging their hands as they walked.

A perfect Valentine's fic, which I enjoyed very much. Thank you. :)

[shimotsuki]

Thanks so much for the encouraging comments. Sometimes I feel unsure about writing Tonks, so I'm very glad to hear you felt the characterization worked here.

[eshesh]

I really enjoyed the tenderness you put into this story, and I agree with everyone else who has commented that the last two paragraphs are perfectly in character for both of them.

Donne's love poems are some of my favorites. What a great idea for Remus to share one with Tonks! And the one you chose is so appropriate: Methinks I lied all winter, when I swore/My love was infinite, if spring make it more. *sigh*

[shimotsuki]

Thanks for reading and commenting. That is a wonderful poem, isn't it! I had a hard time deciding which fragment to include in the fic...

[devonwood]

Very cute ending. :)

I loved the line: " For one wild moment he actually found himself considering the battered half-bar of Honeydukes' chocolate in his other pocket, on hand in case of an encounter with a dementor."

That's very Remus, and I almost feel sorry for the poor guy. :(

Excellent work. :D

[shimotsuki]

Honeydukes' chocolate -- I figure that for Remus, as a true Marauder, it's second nature to cast about for ways to get himself out of a tight spot. Thanks for reading and commenting!