Title: December
Author:
gilpin25Rating & Warnings: PG-13
Prompt: Everlasting Icicles
Format & Word Count: Drabble, 500 words
Summary: After Christmas at the Burrow, where else would Remus go? Set during HBP.
Author's Notes: If anyone's looking for a heavy dose of angst, then look no further. ;) If I can fit another one in, I'll make it extra fluffy!
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In all seriousness, this is just beautiful -- elegant and carefully balanced language, both understated and vivid at the same time (just like a cold clear night), and the bitterness and longing come through so strongly.
I especially like the contrast of this: he wants to be cold. He wants to be chilled to the bone. [...] Ice doesn’t bend. Ice seals up pain and grief -- with this: But it’s so hard to move when you’re made of ice.
I also like the way you've ended it before we know what Remus is going to do -- will he give in to that little italicized voice of hope, even for a few minutes, and let himself thaw in the light and warmth? Or will he slip away without ever letting Tonks know that he was there? It could very easily tip either way.
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I think Remus has become adapt over the years at closing off or bottling up emotions as a way of coping, and so wanting to embrace the icy numbness, and avoid feeling such guilt and longing over Tonks, seemed to fit for this imaginary scene after what must have been quite a series of body blows for him at Christmas. But I also wanted to convey something of the bitterness we see in canon when he talks to Harry, and that it's very much against himself, for being a werewolf, which he must regard as the cause of so much misery. Yet he's probably acted exactly as a fearful man would...
Or will he slip away without ever letting Tonks know that he was there? It could very easily tip either way.
Neither Remus or the writer are sure of that one. ;)
Thank you very much for such thoughtful comments. I always appreciate them from you. :)
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Glad you liked it!:D And no, I'm not sure if he knocked at the door or not...
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