So Close...

[jesspallas]

Title: So Close
Author: jesspallas
Rating: PG though there is a little bit of mildish swearing
Prompts: Exmoor National Park, A Howler, Drama. I was going to try and work in a Day of Feasting but it didn’t fit so I briefly referenced a picnic instead! :)
Word Count: 1633
Summary: “Her heart felt heavy, She wanted to scream in frustration, to slam something

Comments

[mrstater]

This is lovely. Such a fantastic use of weird prompts (you've had two rounds of toughies, we apologize on behalf of the random generator). As always, you write the action so well -- I could visualize everything, and Tonks' emotion is clear, too.

Mostly I love this piece because they feel like such a real couple with a wonderful relationship. Remus is cold and tired and miserable, yet he's cheerful and welcoming of Tonks -- there's so much trust and acceptance of his condition and her reaction to it.

Can we pretty please with Honeydukes on top have an outtake of the picnic proposal? :)

[jesspallas]

Bless, thank you! :) And yeah, I did wince a bit at the prompts but it was an interesting challenge! We'll see about the outtake later if I get the chance...:)

[devonwood]

The ending was great! Honestly, I wouldn't have noticed that she hadn't set up a way to get them back, if you hadn't mentioned it. :D

I loved the use of dialogue and imagery, and the characterizations seemed spot on. Lovely work. :)

[jesspallas]

I didn't notice either until I got to that point and realised they were a bit stuck! ;)

[godricgal]

Really enjoyed this. The little details of their previous trips to Exmoor were lovely, particularly the engagement picnic, I second mrstater's request for an outtake.

I thought it was a superb use of the Howler prompt, really inspired and unique.

I particularly enjoyed Remus' greeting when she finally found him, it seemed so natural - an acknowledgement that Tonks would have been scared for him as he was for her.

[an_fhanai]

I never in all my life would have thought up that idea for a Howler - brilliant.

Well, it sucks for them to be trapped there in the fog like that, but how much worse would it have been if she'd never found him at all?

I'm curious - do you know the park yourself? Are those actual landmarks you used throughout the story?

As long as there's a petition for an outtake, consider my name down as well. ;)

[jesspallas]

I do know Exmoor though it's about ten years since I've been there but every place name and landmark used in this fic (including Chains Barrow which was just too appropriate to pass up) were lifted either from memory or an OS map. I'd recommend it though, Exmoor's a lovely place! :)

[gijane7702]

Brilliant takes on the prompts!!

I second the request for a picnic propsal fic!!

Love the end...
R:"How do we get out of here?"
T: "Er...??"