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[killerforhire]

Title: The Day After The Full Moon

Comments

[sea_thoughts]

Now this is angst. I love the sharp words exchanged between Tonks and Remus, which contrast with Remus's slow, regretful thoughts. And it's what they don't say that really matters, of course.

[pleutaitgouttes]

I do love pathetic!stupid!angry!Remus.
I loved your dialoge.
Brilliant

[molly_coddles]

I like how you used the "snog in a dark pub" prompt to mean a proper tongue-lashing. Unfortunate Remus didn't learn from it.
Very biting piece. Great use of prompts!

[kerrymdb]

I really enjoyed this. What can I say? Angst is my favorite, and you wrote it really well. The tension between Tonks and Remus was very believable in the Hog's Head.

The style of the piece worked really well, too. I liked that you didn't clutter the dialogue up by writing 'he said' 'she said' all the time and instead just let it flow.

Good job!

[phe_o]

Good job--I think you covered a "day of remorse" very, very well. It's not often that we see Remus come undone and I think you did a very good job of it--especially with the comparison to the day after the moon to the day of being hungover.