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[freakinwinky]

Title: A Dream for the hopeless
Author: freakinwinky
Word Count:3,538 (and you wonder why it's so late!)
Prompts: Location:The Burrow, Thing: "There's no need to call me 'sir' Professor" Time: A day of dreams comming true Genre: Romance
Raiting: T for mild sexual implications
Summarry: After a difficult day, Remus attempts to comfort Tonks without allowing his

Comments

[devonwood]

I love it! The imagery you conveyed with the pair of them flying through the stars is wonderful. I loved how you ended it with Remus falling to sleep peacefully. :D

[freakinwinky]

Thank you. It took a while for me to get there, but I think the ending is what I liked best about this peice. I'm also very glad you found the imagery appealing, I fretted horribly over that.

Thanks for reviewing and I'm glad you liked it!

[pleutaitgouttes]

I love your Remus, his poorly vailed selfcontrol is priceless in this fic. I really enjoyed it, a wonderful way to come home from a long day.

[freakinwinky]

Thanks for the encouragment in terms of the chracterization. I'm very particular about the way I write Remus. He's probably my favorite character in the entire series and I really want to get him right in my fan fictions.

I'm glad I was able to give you a nice ending to your day. Thanks and I'm very glad you liked it!

[mrstater]

You know, this is a take on the prompts I hadn't even thought about when we put the groups together, and I really like how you made quite a literal take work into a really original fic.

Remus is definitely the type to have vivid dreams; the poor man just never stops thinking. I like how in the end he had to give in. And he should, because he's right, it's not a dream and won't be like his nightmares.

And I really liked Tonks not being able to control being a smart-ass. Nice way to work in that prompt. Of course Remus would have a hard time not laughing, and of course she'd be upset with herself.

[freakinwinky]

Yes, I was very happy when I saw that I had a dream prompt. I love writing about dream sequences, especially when they apply to Remus. I'm glad you found it fitting with his character.

The "There's no need to call me 'sir'" quote was the difficult one to make work. I wasn't quite sure that I could make it fit. I'm very happy you think I did.

As always I highly value your opinions so, thanks very much for reviewing!

[godricgal]

A lovely story. It does seems like a Remus thing to do - have those dreams and try everything to shut them out. In some ways the intimate dreams could be just as painful to him as the wolf dreams. Two things unlikely to happen, but one he wants desperately

[freakinwinky]

Thank you very much. I've always liked writing about dreams and personal desires of characters. I'm not quite sure why, but that type of thing seems very natural to me. Which was the reason I was very happy that I got this prompt! I'm glad the pain of the 'pleasant' dreams came through as well as the fear expressed in the nightmares.

An yes, about the table thing...I originally had them sitting across from eachother, but then as I was writing decided to change it and have them sit next to eachother. I made a mental note to change the line about Remus sitting and then forgot to do it. In other words, this'll change when I edit it. I'm glad someone noticed and pointed it out to me, or I would have forgoten completely!

I was very happy with the ending I came up with and I'm glad you found it fitting as well. Thanks for reviewing and, as always, I'm happy you liked it!

[sea_thoughts]

Just a kiss indeed! ;)

I really liked how you built up the tension in this story, both through his dreams of laughter and nightmares of bloodshed, with the erotic dreams somewhere in between. I thought Remus's desperate restraint in the midnight meeting was very in character, especially his guilt at even feeling physical desire while Tonks was pouring her heart out to him. I thought her simple acceptance of desire was a wonderful contrast to this agonising.

Two things to note: it's spelt 'shepherd's pie', not 'shepard' and then there's this:

Molly appeared delighted with this arrangement, as did Bill and Arthur who claimed that their wife and mother were driving them to insanity as she had no one to cook for now that the children had left for school.

This is a bit confusing, although I know what you're trying to say. As it stands, the sentence states that Molly is a wife and mother to both of them, not a wife to one and a mother to the other. It doesn't help that you've put 'wife' as the first station when the first person you

[freakinwinky]

Thanks very much for this very insightful review. Once again I'm glad I got the characterization for the two main characters correct. I was afraid they would come off as a bit forced. I'm relieved to know that they don't.

To tell the truth, I worried about the line that you mentioned as well. Originally there was a much longer dialouge between Aurthur, Bill and Remus discussing the reasons for Molly's now frequent invitations.

In the very final draft, I cut it because I was afraid it would make the story drag. Now, however, seeing it in context, I think the orriginal was better. Thus, I'll probably edit it. Thanks for confirming this for me. Thanks for catching the spelling mistake as well. I'm terrible at spelling and need all the help I can get there I'm afraid.

Thanks for reveiwing and I'm glad you liked it.