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[godricgal]

Title: Like a Charm
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[lady_bracknell]

Liked this a lot. I thought you captured the suspended animation feeling of grief well - how fingers itch to have something to do, and food gets prepared but not eaten, just because there's nothing much else to do.

I liked your take on how Tonks and Remus moved from the hospital scene to the hand holding - it seemed believable to me that they'd both acknowledge that there were things that needed to be talked about at length but maybe not immediately, and the I thought you conveyed their need to be together after a year apart really beautifully. I liked the comic touches you threw in to stop things getting angsty - Kreacher and Dobby perving on them in particular - it didn't detract from the sexiness of what came next at all.

Wonderful stuff - and an odd set of prompts, so doubly well done ;).

[gilpin25]

I think this is the quietest R/T reconciliation after the hospital scene that I've read. And it works so very well because of that; totally in keeping with the numbness that hits you after someone dies unexpectedly, and you do daft things like playing dominoes with crackers simply for something to do, and to avoid thinking about how very frightening the future is. All that was excellently done, as was Remus saying the crucial things she needs to hear, but not actually wanting to have a whole in-depth chat right then about what went wrong and what they've got to face up to. Ties in perfectly with just wanting each other, because they're exhausted and scared

[godricgal]

I think that once Tonks knows that Remus is coming back to her, it is quite likely that she'd be willing to put off the serious discussion, particularly given that - as you said - they are both so much in need of comfort. That said, I was a little worried that from a reader's perspective it would seem like it was coming from out of the blue, so it's very good to have the affirmation that it does work.

I'd liked to have had a chance to expand the Flich chase. The inclusion of the few paragraphs that do cover how it panned out were an 11th hour addition - at 11pm the day before I posted. I really could have gone on but I had to cut myself short. When the event is over, perhaps I'll take another look at it, or even write an outtake.

Thank you very much for your lovely comments, tis much appreciated.

[kileaiya]

This was wonderfully written. A post-hospital scene story must be difficult to write, it’s such a crucial moment, but you pulled it of flawlessly.

The sex scene was touching and beatifully written, not to graphic, just right.

And Pervy-Voyeur!Kreacher was priceless.

[godricgal]

Thank you very much. It was tricky to write in the sense that I had no background for their emotions in this verse, I'm very pleased that it worked for you.

Thanks again for you comments. :)

[jncar]

this is one of the best post-hospital scenes that I've read. It's so easy for them to get over the top with angst, that your quieter, lighter take is very refreshing.

It was so clear that the only thing that would help them get through the numbness and horror, was each other. As many issues as they still had to resolve, the comfort that they found in each other was a giant leap in the right direction.

And the humorous bits were lots of fun, especially Pervy!Kreacher. LOL.

[godricgal]

Thank you! I'm pleased to hear you think the less angtsy approach works. I really think that in the end it has got to be Remus coming to her, otherwise Tonks is always going to wonder if she forced him into it.

Hee. Glad you enjoyed Pervy!Kreacher, with the setting of the kitchens, it really was too much to resist. ;)

[molly_coddles]

Wow, this is excellent. I like how you've let them reconnect first with the promise to talk things out later. Sometimes it just works better that way - takes some of the tension out of things, lol.
The silliness of the kitchens and playing hide-n-seek with Filch and Mrs. Norris fits, and moves the fic along, altering the mood smoothly.
The intimacy was well done, and I adore the ending. Especially since it involves sleeping, which sounds very appealing to me right now. ;)
Spectacular! Loved it lots. :)

[godricgal]

Thank you. I wasn't sure at first if getting them back together without having the necessary talk would work, particularly when it's Tonk' pov and so the reader doesn't actually find out what Remus is thinking - so thanks for the confirmation that it worked for you.

Thanks again for your kind comments. I hope you're managing to fit some relaxation into your weekend. :)