Unforeseen Attachments

[shimotsuki]

Title: Unforeseen Attachments
Author: shimotsuki
Rating & Warnings: PG for mild profanity
Prompts: Romantic comedy; Day of Separation; Flesh-Eating Slug Repellent; image #21 (old-fashioned kitchen)
Word Count: 3570
Summary: The Weasley twins apply their formidable research and development skills to the problem of Walburga Black's portrait, but things go

Comments

[lady_bracknell]

I really enjoyed this - it was such an inventive way to use your prompts. I thought you wrote Fred and George really well - the tendancy is to make them total jokers, so here I liked that you had them coming up with complicated and advanced magic (and yet not being able to cook anything but beans on toast for themselves).

I really liked the bit at the end, too, with Remus being totally oblivious and Sirius just sitting back and watching. He'll be very smug indeed when Remus finally figures it out ;).

[shimotsuki]

Thanks for the comments! I'm glad you liked the twins; I've always figured that if they can run their own business at seventeen, with some of their stock being inventions of their own, they'd have to be incredibly bright. I bet they could even cook, if they actually put their minds to it. ;)

And writing oblivious Remus is fun, heh.

[godricgal]

This was a great read. It's funny and lighthearted, but I really liked how you used your prompts and weaved in the details from canon, and those little moments between Remus and Tonks.

Good job with the roast! And I was very pleased to see Remus in defense of beans on toast. ;)

[shimotsuki]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked the story; thanks again for the cooking tips. ;) I was definitely thinking of you and mrstater when I wrote about the beanz.

I'm also really happy to hear you actually found this funny! Trying to write humo(u)r is scary.

[pinkhairedauror]

Weee very nice!!! (And of course Tonks can always tell the twins apart! Ahem)

I really enjoyed this; kept me grinning, chuckling... and on the edge of my seat. (And oh does Sirius have reason enough to be smug!)

And I think this was one of the best fic openings, the first couple of paragraphs, that I've read in a very long time. Brilliant!

[shimotsuki]

Thank you for the kind words! I'm really glad to hear you thought the humor worked. And smug Sirius is kind of endearing, isn't he...

[oneandonlysusan]

This was fun to read! Creative use of the prompts, and I especially liked the ending.

[shimotsuki]

Thank you very much!

[mrstater]

Hee! This is so fun! I really loved Remus cooking, for starters. Your descriptions of it were really whimsical and wizardly. Of course he'd be sexy in the kitchen, and of course Tonks is looking at him that way. Why can't he see that, the silly man?

The twins really stole the show; you write them so well! I loved them rattling off what Molly would serve -- those boys are spoiled and any girl George is with will be hard-pressed to compete, won't she? Hehe

The sticking charm scene was great. Was there an I Love Lucy episode ages ago where Lucy and Ethel got stuck in wallpaper paste or something? This had that kind of classic comedy feel to it and I loved Tonks' solution --- and even more than that, how nonchalant Remus is about a Flesh-eating slug nibbling at his flesh to free him! I guess a werewolf would take everything in stride. ;)

Great work, as always. :)

[shimotsuki]

Aw, I'm glad you liked it -- thanks for the comments. The cooking scene was fun to imagine and write. I was amused by the idea that the twins might have Molly-style meals as their default assumption, but then actually be perfectly happy to eat anything. And I'm so glad the stuck-to-the-wall part felt like a real comedy scene to you! I was really worried about being able to pull that off, actually.

(Also, I may not have made this clear enough in the fic, but Remus is nonchalant about the slug because Tonks only has to sic it on Fred! Once Fred is free, he can cast the countercharm to get Remus unstuck. Heh.)