fic or something

[mermaidfangs]

Title: My Foes Exult When I Totter, My Heart Exults in Your Deliverance
Characters: Kara/Laura, Cain, Laura POV
Summary: Kind of an AU take on Pegasus, etc, loosely inspired by Ray-boo's fic and something I wrote but am too embarrassed to post.
Words: 2800
Rating: MA
Warnings: violence, rape/sexual assault

A/N: I want ALL THE REWARDS because I

Comments

[mermaidfangs]

::hugs:: Thank you, what a lovely comment.

Your fic makes me want to go back and delete my fic because it won't ever be this.

Don't be a silly head. I blame you and wishflsinfl for starting this whole Kara/Laura dark!fic obsession I now have.

Sometimes, phone!fic, and fic written whilst I'm in a Mood (TM), come out better because I have fewer inhibitions, and so I'm glad you felt the emotional intensity of this, baby. It's this fandom, yo. We're a thoughtful, interesting, dark bunch, and it's positively inspiring.

[mermaidfangs]

<3 <3 Hee!

I use swear words so much that I don't even think they up the intensity of what I'm saying anymore.

Thank you, Ray-boo.

Also, Madam N. That's my new nickname forEVER.

[mermaidfangs]

<3 <3 Your fic inspired this in a big way, dear. You always come up with situations that get at the heart of things, and this was a little bit of a reversal of what you wrote, or a remix, I guess. I'm so glad you liked this, baby. You know how easy it is to get bent out of shape and nail-bitey about posting angsty stuff.

[astreamofstars]

The original version of this that I saw was amazing, but this blows me away, hon. How do you manage to put so much raw emotion into your stories? It's hurty and painful and just so them, and I can't believe you wrote it in a few hours on your phone. There's never a wasted moment or a wasted scene in your fics - every bit of it is needed and necessary and not too much.

Everything I said to you about how well you write Laura is true. Your Kara is obviously going to be perfect, but your Laura is too, and I can't get enough of her.

Do you know, I feel ridiculously privileged that you write so much fic for me? I really do. Every bit of it is wonderful.

[mermaidfangs]

<3 <3 I added a bit, did you notice??? I'm all stuck here with nothing to do but sleep and watch bad television, so I might as well write fic, yeah? Actually, predictive text and being able to do things one-handed makes it go pretty fast? Once you get used to it. And I can't spend a billion hours going back and editing things, so it forces me to just move along. My friend is bringing me a keyboard attachment for my phone. (My computer is at home so not accessible at the moment).

I'm so glad you like it! Re: raw emotion. I don't know. I'm an emotional basket case, you know that, so I guess some of the times it just ends up in the stories.

Do you know, I feel ridiculously privileged that you write so much fic for me? I really do. Every bit of it is wonderful.

*grins* I'm glad. And likewise. I love it when we get a back and forth going.

[word_vomity]

The fact that this masterpiece was written ON YOUR PHONE is like Kerouac's scroll for On The Road or something. How is that even possible?! You are an amazing, magic, wizard woman!

This is just . . .spectacular. Yes it is dark but it is also so moving. I did cry, I'm not embarrassed to admit. Just, catharsis, so much catharsis is your stuff. This one especially. How do you write like that? Show me the way! ;)

Laura can barely make out his face, not without her glasses. “You disappoint me,” she states calmly. “If you were my son, I'd have been glad for the Attacks, because it would mean freedom from the shame of bearing you.”

I freaking love that line! It sounds JUST like Laura. Her strength throughout this is just so true to her. I love how you write her in this entire story. I love that she gets all hot from Kara boxing. Who wouldn't?!

There is nothing I can't survive. Oh Kara, my bb! *sobs sobs sobs*

ALL THE MOTHER FRAKKING AWARDS TO YOU! EVERY LAST ONE!

[mermaidfangs]

Ha! To be fair, it took me hours and hours. My left arm is injured, so I can actually go faster on the phone because of predictive text and the tiny keyboard that's perfect for a single thumb. <3 <3

I cried when I was writing it, so yeah, no embarrassment allowed. Your comments are always so kind, and I feel like you always pick up on exactly what I'm trying to convey. In this case, it's Laura's strength, and how she sometimes survives by becoming overly rational or emotionally distant. Ugh, and I love that she can be so majorly insulting to her attacker all like, no big deal. *pets*

<3 <3 Now you have to post YOUR fic and let everyone marvel : )

[word_vomity]

My left arm is injured

I don't like hearing that one bit! Hope you're alright, dear. :( *kisses it better*

And I got an email from you today, but it was like a Re: to another one that I never got. Or maybe accidentally deleted. Or maybe went to spam-land. Idk. Can you resend? Please please please!

Also I would never post mine in such close proximity to one of yours! I can't be following that number! :P

[mermaidfangs]

I am all right, yeah! It's an ongoing thing, nothing new : ) *huggles*

I resent it, did you get it?

[dance_the_dance]

Can I just quote things that made me cry? Because I'll never have words for how PERFECT this is. I'm still crying actually, the silent kind of crying that I kinda don't even notice that I'm doing. (It's a very good thing if a fic can make me cry like that! Just in case you'd want to worry about it or something. :))

When Cain drags Kara inside, she cannot bear to meet her eyes, because Laura is beaten and naked and dirty and not at all the woman Kara loves.
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It makes Laura's chest hurt seeing how easily Kara accepts that she’s unloved, even more so when Laura realises her love for Kara has been so hidden away that Kara never believes it existed in the first place.
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"I just, what if I stay here anyway? On your sofa? I don't even have to go back to your cabin. Just for sleep. You never even have to see me. This can be the last time. I was just thinking it might be easier for me to sleep if I knew you were sort of close by, you know? It’s stupid, I know it’s stupid."
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"Don't you say that," says Kara, kissing Laura's forehead

[mermaidfangs]

Can I just quote things that made me cry?

*huggles* You can do whatever you like, bb. It's always just nice to know you've read, because I feel like you're my brain twin when it comes to certain stuff. Crying is good, isn't it? Sometimes, I watch the Breathe Me ending of Six Feet Under when I need a bit of a cry. I cried a little when I wrote this, certain parts, anyway.

You picked out some of my favourite lines! <3 See, brain twins.