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[mel0804]

Pairing: Ennis/Jack
Rating: PG-13 to NC-17 (Warning: violence !)
Summary: AU_AU. With this story I wanted to dive in the dark side of Brokeback Mountain. I wanted to experiment with fear, uncertainty and doubt. Ennis and Jack meet each other in the modern time.
Dedication: This story is dedicated to my German beta tanzmaeusi, who encouraged me to write this

Comments

[fl1789]

THEY ARE SO LUCKY TO HAVE FOUND EACH OTHER.
I HOPE YOU CAN UPDATE SOON, I REALLY WANT TO KNOW WHAT'S GOING TO HAPPEN WITH THESE TWO.
fl.

[mel0804]

It all depend on my lovely tizi who is translating this story ;-).
But I'm sure there will be an update in the near future. Thank you very much for your comment !

"A pair of deuces"

[forever9218]

Ennis backed startled as the rag touched his bruised and burningly throbbing skin, and as he felt Jack's soft ministrations on his face, triggering an onrush of emotions in him at whose mercy he felt helpless. He couldn't remember the last time he had felt the caring touch of another person, and the need to just roll up and let go became nearly overwhelming.

Rejecting Jack's help almost harshly, he took the rag out of Jack's hand without a word, pushed it hard to his wound, and with fierce satisfaction he felt the sharp pain that drove off in an instant the memory of Jack's careful touch.

What a beautifully drawn description of how Ennis felt when Jack tried to comfort him after his fall in BBM. Your writing is hypnotic in its pace and tone; the text is wrapped with love and care, but unafraid to explore the shadows of loneliness. I am going to try to control my anticipation for more, but it will be difficult because this story is just so powerful. Thanks so much, Debra.

Re: "A pair of deuces"

[mel0804]

I have to thank you, Debra, for your beautiful comment !
I'm glad that the stories I'm writing touches other peoples hearts because every story I write surely touches mine - like the movie that somehow captured me...forever, I guess...

[bbm_citygirl]

Oh my goodness, there were so many parts I really loved. If I started quoting them all I'd end up repeating almost the entire chapter. But:

Ennis felt all of a sudden life kiss him, releasing him from his cold rigor.

I just love the idea of life kissing Ennis. It's such a sleeping beauty kind of moment in a way coming about by just looking at Jack.

I can't tell you how much I am enjoying your story. It is just wonderful!

[mel0804]

Maybe it sounds a little bit weird - but the first scene - as Jack looked to Ennis and the camera captured Jake's beautiful eyes - impressed me so much I still can't believe how much... His gaze was so innocent, so pure but also full of curiosity, he was secretly coquetting with Ennis and it was so endlessly beautiful to see - so I guess that's where this "Kiss of Life" came from... ;-).

[kmdlrd]

Such a wonderful chapter. I could feel the little bit of light entering their separate worlds of dark. Can't wait for more. Thanks - B

[mel0804]

Thank you ! More is definitely coming... ;-).

[ramona4jake]

A ray of hope ! With only a look from those wonderful blue eyes, with those dark eyelashes, and "Ennis felt all of a sudden life kiss him, releasing him from his cold rigor" --> “Jack, I swear...,“ Ennis whispered. “I'll be back.“
So beautiful, mel, a poem of love at its beginnings !
Thank you !

[mel0804]

A ray of hope !

YES, that's right ;-) !