Obscurity

[mel0804]

Pairing: Ennis/Jack
Rating: PG-13 to NC-17 (Warning: violence !)
Summary: AU_AU. With this story I wanted to dive in the dark side of Brokeback Mountain. I wanted to experiment with fear, uncertainty and doubt. Ennis and Jack meet each other in the modern time.
Dedication: This story is dedicated to my German beta tanzmaeusi, who encouraged me to write this

Comments

[el_wing]

It's always a pleasure to read your writing. This was so painful to read (and for poor, Jack). That asshole Malone.

Can't wait for part two!

[mel0804]

Thank you !!
I didn't like Malone in the movie - so I was glad to give him a little part in this story where he could be the "real" asshole... ;-)
Hooray to fantasy and fiction, right ;-)?

[sweetje]

I can understand Jack's depression and hopelessness at the situation. Nobody cares that he almost died at the hands of another. I was shocked though when he tried to kill himself because of it.

I wonder and worry where he went. I'm looking forward to your next part of this wonderful story. I absolutely love it. : )
Debra

[mel0804]

I was shocked though when he tried to kill himself because of it.

Oh, I'm sorry.
This is a misunderstanding. Jack didn't try to kill himself. He smashed a glas because he was so angry and he cut himself. But this Jack is strong - not physically but in his heart he is a fighter. He wants to survive - so you really don't need to worry about him in this case.

[sweetje]

Oh, thank goodness! I did misunderstand that. Thank you for clearing it up for me. It makes me feel better (well, not because Jack cut himself) that Jack didn't try to end his life. : )
Debra

[samtyr]

I was glad to see this update. This fic is very good even though this world (AU) seems incredibly harsh and unforgiving (much like our own, sadly.) Poor Jack -- I'm surprised that he survived in the first place though I have the feeling the cops wished that he hadn't. (Randall probably already knew who the attackers were, and supported them.) I can hardly wait to read your next update. Thank you for sharing this.

[mel0804]

Yes, they are living in a harsh world and it was also for me really painful to write this story. Sometimes I thought I couldn't stand it anymore - but Jack already met Ennis so there's hope... ;-)

[onlyonesock]

This was a very emotional and sad chapter. How awful to be so alone and broken.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

[mel0804]

Thank you ! Yes, it was sad - but there's hope ! Promise ;-).

[ramona4jake]

So much raw pain !! You're a too good writer, I felt it so deep - I can see Jack so deeply hurt and tormented.....and alone ?! I hope this was the peak, the worst - Jack being hurt is something I have the hardest time dealing with .
Thank you, mel !

[mel0804]

I think it was the worst - but all in all this story has a steady subliminal touch of melancholy...