The Overlord's Lady, Chapter 5

[joanhello]

Title: The Overlord's Lady, Chapter 5

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[joanhello]

Could you be a little more specific? Because I did have an intentional change of atmosphere here where, when she started her investigation, she was in the same world with Megamind and viewing him externally and then, when she came into the stroke room and turned on the video, she was, in a sense, inside his head. So I want to know whether I got the effect I wanted and you just didn't like it, or whether I accidentally created a discontinuity of style that I didn't notice and you did. So please, if you can, point out what I seemed to be doing differently in this chapter than the others, with quotations if you can.

[joanhello]

Thank you. That tells me what I need to know. Clearly the mistake I made was in Chapter 4 as much as in this one. When she stands up and shouts "No!" in response to his plans for getting into a fight, she reveals a concern for him that she had not even admitted to herself yet. Roxanne is very attached to being in control of the way she presents herself and the fact that she lost control like that over him just infuriates her. In a way that is natural but not at all logical, she is as angry with him as with herself over that. She wasn't ready to have positive feelings for him, much less to reveal them to anyone, and she wants to make them go away. That's why she spends half her snooping time looking at his porn: she wants to find something that will disgust or frighten her enough to blow away those positive feelings. She wants to bring her own state of mind back to one dominated by resentment. My error was in failing to convey all this in the course of the story. Now that it's been posted, I'm not going to rewrite, but I

Missing Out

[anonymous]

First off, I just wanted to say how much I love this story so far! It's got an interesting plot, and Megamind is so serious! I especially love the way you update every day, it cheers me up when thetr's no new updates on FanFiction :)

Second thing is, I feel left out.

I don't have a LJ account or one for this community, so I can't read The Stroke Room :( I noticed you made a reference to it in A Toast to Minion: 'They both wanted to be pilots?' Please tell me what happened in the room, I really want to know. -Purplegirl97

Re: Missing Out

[anonymous]

Thank you Karen!

Re: Missing Out

[joanhello]

I was in the midst of writing a summary when Karen posted this. It's almost exactly what I was going to post. (Great minds think alike, right?) All I will add is that there's an addendum, little thing about 300 words, which I have just unlocked so you can read it. It's at http://megamind-movie.livejournal.com/655618.html#cutid1.

Also, Karen, I'm going to put a link to this into the text as an alternate source for people who, for one reason or another, won't be reading "The Stroke Room" itself.

[ladyspock]

I, like Roxanne, am glad it wasn't a lot of stuff about bondage and dominance. I've read stories that incorporate that kind of thing in a light-hearted and humorous way (generally with Roxanne being the dominant one, even when she's the one tied up!), which I have enjoyed. But with your more serious treatment of Megamind and his longings and desires, to show him as being into S&M would've left kind of an icky feeling, actually. Wouldn't have exactly made him very endearing! It is obvious that, as you have revealed in your story, what he really wants is to be in a loving relationship, and to be accepted.

I have a hard time imagining Megamind with any other woman besides Roxanne, and yet, reading stories where he is paired with a male is not hard to imagine at all. Go figure. :)

Keep writing! I'll catch up sooner or later.

[joanhello]

I think one of the things the movie established early on is that Megamind hungers for ordinary love, and most of his villainous behavior is rooted in hopelessness about that hunger ever being satisfied. But in his fantasy life, he can have all the ordinary love he wants.

More is coming up.

[aurawind]

Oh man... I don't know what to say about this chapter. I remember "The stroke room", and it surprised me to see it inside this story, but it makes sense. Now I'll go to read more. Great job :)

[joanhello]

Thanks.