Great ending. There's some sort of editting problem around the time they meet in the hall after he decides to stay that confuses things (and almost made me stop reading cause I hate badly editted/written fics). But I read and I loved. Thanks for this.
You know I really loved this story. I'd have loved it more if you hadn't rushed it though.
There are awful mistakes that should have been picked up by your beta, which is a shame because they slightly spoil the story.
And it is good. You're a very good writer and I don't just say things like that. But please have more faith in yourself and write longer, more detailed tales rather than just skimming over.
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drink and ljs do not mix.
i still have one more chapter to go.
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There are awful mistakes that should have been picked up by your beta, which is a shame because they slightly spoil the story.
And it is good. You're a very good writer and I don't just say things like that. But please have more faith in yourself and write longer, more detailed tales rather than just skimming over.
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But thanks for reading.
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I am looking forward to your next story! YOu really got the characters right!
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