Fic: The Camelot Complex (J^2 for Harlequin SPN)

[mayoihumbert]

Yay! This is the first fanfic I've ever fully completed, so I'm embarrassingly pleased with myself and also dead from staying up to write it. I'm sorry to subject people to my unbetaed procrastinatory cobblings, but again, Yay! I declare victory and will now collapse.

Btw, don't read this if fics about real people squick you. I'm specifically

Comments

[mermaid4fic]

Hey, congratulations on posting your first completed fic! I did that just a couple of months ago, so I know how scary (and yet exciting) it can be

[mayoihumbert]

Hi, thanks a lot for taking the time to leave a decent concrit. Now I will savage you for the injury you have done my egoooo! Ahem, no, really, it was really nice of you to actually take me at my word. I know that doesn't always turn out well.

I totally worried that the tone went too quickly from dark to light, but then I was tired and engaged in excuse-making. Like, it's harlequin. Even rape is explained away by the HEA! It's positively Shakespearean, dude. *shifty-eyes*

Lol. I guess that's what a beta is for, to keep crack the whip when you both know the fic has an issue. Your comments were really great, and spot on for me.

The thing I disliked the most about it was that Jared was so stooopid. This tragic woobie misunderstanding is my least favorite plot point. (I'm looking at you, Romeo and Juliet!) Thanks for picking up on that. Next time, I will--get more sleep--and try not ignore my own inner critic due to laziness.

Hey, congrats on your 1st fic, too. It is really cool to have it behind you, isn't it?

Btw:
I understand that

[mermaid4fic]

it was really nice of you to actually take me at my word. I know that doesn't always turn out well.

Yeah, some people react very badly to concrit, so I only offer it when the author seems both sane and receptive!

I totally know what you mean about romance novels and their dodgy plotting - I've read far more of them than I'm willing to admit ;-)

That's a pretty slick way of asking for a sequel

*smiles sweetly* I am nothing if not slick...
to be honest, I was thinking more of you inserting a section from Jared's POV if you ever decide to rewrite the story. But hell, I like the sequel idea even better!

[mayoihumbert]

Right? The only romance writer I can respectably cop to reading is Georgette Heyer, 'cuz she makes her dodginess a feature instead of a bug. I haven't reached her expert level yet, but perhaps one day.

No plans to rewrite, I'm afraid. And I don't think my next fic will even be in this fandom, sorry, but then there's always a possibility.

[impala_chick]

This is beautiful and angsty and I love the way you write Jared! :D

...sorry, he's Jensen's straight boyfriend.
OMG Best Line Ever.

Jared has an awful look on his face, uncomfortable and defiant. "Fuck them, you can be my boyfriend."

"I'm honored."

"Please, Jensen. I need you."
The Love is so DAMN Big. ♥

I can't believe this is your first fic, congrats!

[mayoihumbert]

Thanks for commenting!

Uh, sorry about the abrupt change in tone? It was really sweet of you to write midway of my tiny fic, and then it goes from angsty to sappy. ^^; Oops?

[impala_chick]

Oh no, I LOVED the progression and the ending too!! A little schmoop always makes for a perfect ending :D I love when the boys get to be happy together and it all works out. I forgot to mention my most favorite line, though!!

"You are so gay, Boyfriend," Jensen says, rolling his eyes.
*HEEEEEEE*

[anmkosk]

Nice one :)

[mayoihumbert]

Thanks. :)

[ceares]

congrats on your 1st fic! I really love the 'straight' boyfriend line. I too admit I would have liked a more gradual shift in tone, but also because I was enjoying your writing and would loved to have more. I thought Jared blurting out random 'edgy' stuff about Jensen to his parents, and everyone's reactions was hilarious. And I know it's cruel of me, but I always think grown kids throwing a fit over their parents divorce is comedy gold.

[mayoihumbert]

To be honest I loved that line, too. I amuse myself way too much.

You don't know me, but if you did, you'd know that if my (as yet nonexistent) adult children threw a fit, I'd say, "Too bad, suckas! I'm free from your shackles now." In those words, too. ^^;

Thanks for your kind words and your honesty.

[trueshellz]

this made me giggle
its was so cute
and sweet
*hugs*

[mayoihumbert]

Thanks! My goal is to write actual explicit sex so maybe I can make you blush next time. ;)