Comments | maxvinyl: rape culture

maxvinyl

rape culture

Mar 20, 2010 14:25

here's my research paper. I'd really, really appreciate constructive criticism, as it's due tomorrow and I'm still worried (doesn't help that I've gone 700 words over the limit. I really can't stay within the word count limit, can I?) that it isn't good enough.

( Living in a Rapist's World: Rape Culture in Contemporary America )

Comments 19

jolfolfille March 21 2010, 06:05:45 UTC

This is not something I say often, but GOD FUCKING DAMN IT, YES. I am ENRAGED, so it must be a good paper. It's great - the sources are great, I saw no errors, it's well-written... I love the bit at the end about the dance, and love that you mentioned Twilight. I wish everyone in the world could read this paper. This is... yes. FUCK YES.

kiimp March 21 2010, 18:53:16 UTC

Hiya random commenter, I just wanted to let you know that you should never use the word 'modern' if you mean 'contemporary' :) modern is a very specific historical period in the early 20th century. So I'd say contemporary!

maxvinyl March 21 2010, 18:55:13 UTC

thank-you! I'll definitely change that.

nikkigoesdown March 21 2010, 19:01:45 UTC

i don't have any suggestions but i just wanted to say that it was very well-written and powerful. i actually got angry while reading it. great essay.

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maxvinyl March 21 2010, 21:45:35 UTC

ah, thank-you! I didn't catch that one.

lochnessmelissa March 21 2010, 22:33:28 UTC

This was an amazing essay and honestly, reading a lot of the scenarios and statistics and especially the part about abortion made me feel slightly sick and I think that's a good thing. And I'm glad you included Twilight because I've had that discussion numerous times and am hoping against all hope that that series isn't going to help foster and even worse rape culture: one of young girls who believe that rape and assault are nothing more than expressions of a man's love and affection.

The only thing that bugged me was how the beginning seemed to imply that women are the only ones who are raped, but I'm sure you're aware that it happens to men as well and I'm assuming that this is most likely for a women's studies class so that point is fairly irrelevant.

maxvinyl March 21 2010, 22:38:16 UTC

yeah, I wanted to include a small section on that, but it read like I'd gone off on a tangent because it wasn't 100% relevant to my thesis. I might make a note of it, though, where I mention femiphobia since that's what it tends to be a result of.

OH and I finished your tree - I hope it's what you wanted. I didn't include the ground like you mentioned because I thought it would look odd, but if you still want me to add it in, I will

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lochnessmelissa March 21 2010, 22:51:28 UTC

I love it! Looking at it, I agree that the ground would look weird. I especially love the roots. Thank you so much!

maxvinyl March 21 2010, 22:56:27 UTC

I'm glad you like it! I wasn't sure if perhaps I made it too wide or not tall enough or whatever. I'll get you the HQ picture later tonight.

also, regarding my essay - I just edited the post to reflect some changes. it's just in the three paragraphs right before the conclusion: I split the first one, moved up the one about the gang rape, and made the new paragraph more about male-on-male rape and homophobia. is that better?

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