Fic: Junior Mints and Morning Breath [R]

[pipisafoat]

Title: Junior Mints and Morning Breath
Pairing: Mary/Marshall
Rating: R, some slight foodplay
Spoilers: minor for Trojan Horst and One Night Stan
Notes: Prompted by guiltyreasons on comment_fic: In Plain Sight, Marshall/Mary, taste of chocolate on your lips

Comments

[pygmymuse]

Okay, I had to read the last part again because I missed something the first time around. I was going through it, thinking, "Oh, this build up is great" and then I was thinking that the angst was rather brutal, and then I blinked and missed the happy ending.

Very nice. I like the evolution of it, and the coffee part (where is the guy to bring this coffee addict something? *rolls eyes*).

Coffee and junior mints. Awesome. :)

[pipisafoat]

then I blinked and missed the happy ending
Oops! I hope it actually makes sense, considering I wrote it at work. (Yeah, I'm a model employee for sure.)

Glad you liked it! Sounds like you need a pocket-sized Marshall for your coffee addiction...

[pygmymuse]

Actually, I'm a very, very fast reader. I retain well too, but sometimes the speed gets the better of me, and I miss stuff. It made sense, it was just a matter of slowing down to get it all. :)

Yes, I do need a Marshall. I'm not sure I want him pocket-size though... :P

[pipisafoat]

I had the same speed problem when I reread it, too. I really hate it when my mind's working faster than my fingers and I skip writing whole paragraphs at a time... always a bitch to fix.

Yes, I do need a Marshall. I'm not sure I want him pocket-size though...
Oh, you and Snerky. So demanding! Everyone wants their own Marshall, full-sized. (Psh, I do, too, so really, I can't talk. He's just too awesome and adorable for his own good.)

[snerkyone]

Okay, I got really confused by the first paragraph for some reason, but once I got that figured out it worked out well. Cute story. :)

And while I don't drink coffee, I'd still like my own Marshall, please. Maybe he can bring me iced tea instead? No? Oh hell, for a Marshall-like guy, I'm willing to fake it (the coffee drinking, you pervs :)!

[pipisafoat]

Yeah, the whole thing is rather all over the place. *shrugs*

Right, so, if I ever work out how to clone characters, you and pygmymuse are first on the list for a Marshall. I'll keep that in mind. (And now aren't you sad that I quit science?)

Ah, right, and thanks! Glad you liked.

[snerkyone]

I think the confusion came more from me - I was distracted, and must have skipped a sentence or something. It was fine when I re-read it. :)

Yeah, kind of bummed that I opted out of science back in college now. I was pretty good at human genetics, too. *grumbles*

[randomrattle]

Great discourse on the slow unfolding of Mary and Marshall's relationship from Marshall's pov! I especially liked the line: And if Stan didn't have to send you out of the office quite as often, all it meant was that the keeper had a better handle on the animal, not that the animal was making an effort to play nicer.

I was with Snerkyone on feeling lost for about two or three paragraphs at first because I couldn't tell who the speaker was, but once I figured it out, it made sense. You wrote this at work? You bad employee, you! *g*

Chocolate! yayz!

[pipisafoat]

Chocolate! yayz!
LOL. See, this is why I love you guys.

Ahh, that makes sense why it was confusing. Thanks! And I'm glad you liked it! (Yes, yes, terrible employee. I do it all the time.)

[guiltyreasons]

Wow I love Marshel's point of view here. He's so obviously moreopen than Mary, but at somethings he's way smarter than her too. God I just lvoe this pairing. I can't believe my little prompt made you want to write all this. Amazing work!

[pipisafoat]

If you love this pairing, you should join this community! And keep prompting IPS on comment_fic - I'll keep writing them for you. Thanks for reading, and I'm glad you liked it!

[guiltyreasons]

Now that I know your looking I'm definitely be prompting a hell of a lot more.