fic: The Shoaling Sea - Part V

[marwanthefirst]

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[shadow_chaser09]

The icon stays. After what I just read, the icon stays! I need a Bush is Pissed icon...then with the background some flaming hells. That was definitely an emotional wringer you've put me through and I love you to pieces for it. :D

There's so much I can say, but I don't know how to express it...forgive me for the loss of words. I'm going to either go cry or try to comfort Bush now.

[marwanthefirst]

Lol, but your icon is so cheerful . . . :) The next chapter is the first I wrote of the story, so you can probably guess that emotional wringing was what I wanted as well--it was rather amusing, once I wrote all that angst, I was like 'shit, now I have to write something to explain how he got like that . . .' XD

everybody read this so fast, I'm not even done responding to old comments! Sorry my posting slowed--I started a new job monday, and the 8-5 really kills the writing spare time :(

[eglantine_br]

Oh, men. Poor all of them. Poor Bush, especially. He is such a good guy and you have made him so real.

I want Horatio to wake up and be ok. Please hurry with the next chapter!

[marwanthefirst]

Thanks! I mean . . poor Bush . . . *but happy me*. I get really conflicted writing Bush because at times I think maybe he'd be more practical than I want him to be, and then I have a mental argument in which I convince myself that he can be sappy :) I'll have the next chap up tomorrow evening (er, tomorrow nowish--who knows what time zone you all are on!)

[legume_shadow]

Just a question: couldn't the harpoonist "try" to shoot the incoming boats and try to put a hole into one?

Ah Bush...what you tried to do to rescue your captain...it's all right, you did a good job *pats Bush*

And, somehow, I need an icon of Bush with glowing eyes and laughing evilly as the Haute burns...though the ending kind of ruins the righteous anger that Bush had...though I really do like the fact that everything came crashing down in both relief and sadness...

*hugs Bush* it's all right, it's all right...Horatio will be fine...(I hope)...

[marwanthefirst]

Hmm *contemplates holes in writing*. I'd forgotten about the harpoon gun! but now that I'm forced to justify it, I would say that if the frenchmen stayed long enough for the longboats to get in harpoon range, they'd risk getting caught, so they figured 'screw it--I'm out!', except for the malingerers, which I HAD to leave, because Bush had to kill SOMEBODY! We'll pretend they were just stupid frenchmen or something :\

regarding the previous chapters discussion, I must say there is a lot of mother hen Bush approaching, but I might have to add some righteous anger, given the crowd's apetite . . .

[legume_shadow]

We like the righteous angry mother hen Bush...he's worried, but he's the angry worried! Hmm...maybe that should go on a t-shirt or something...

I read above that you've started a new job! Just wanted to say congrats and you're very lucky to have a job in this economy right now! Don't let it put you off too much in terms of trying to update! I speak from experience in working at least 9-10 hours a day at my job while coming home and writing/editing...its all in my head at work and at home, I'm rearing to go to write more and as fast as I can! Weekends are the best (if you have them off) to write!

I think that "Bush is a righteous angry mother hen" really should now go on a t-shirt... ;)

[marwanthefirst]

thanks--and I'll try to keep that in mind! Things should be fine in the long term, but I had to relocate for the job, so now I come home and think 'well, I could write, or I could search craiglist for a desk, so I'm not writing on the floor' XD. Nonetheless, I HOPE to keep on track for a finale by next week *yikes!*

[legume_shadow]

I went the semi-cheap way and brought a folding table for my desk and a folding chair for my chair. ;)

[shezzawatto]

Time zone GMT+10 so off to bed now, but just wanted to say how impressive this is. Restraint. So period appropriate. Characters totally consistent, and tension well built. I tend towards H/A 'ship usually, but my goodness, you make the HH/WB case so convincing and poignant. Bush's lack of articulateness and inner conflicts are completely him.

Am also enjoying your efforts in the technical line - battle, ship manoevres etc. Obvious work in research.

Well done and keep it coming.

[marwanthefirst]

Thank you! that's quite the compliment, and it really means a lot. Hopefully my writing will continue to be to your tastes even when you're not about to pass out from sleep deprivation! I often find myself in the opposite position--it's hard for me to read Archie fic--and knowing how much my preference affects what I read, I'm gratified you gave this a chance and enjoyed it. I must endeavor to do the same with H/A! :)

On a writing note, I find that 'restraint' is the hardest to achieve, because the first scenes I write are usually the juicy ones, and then when I go back to flesh out the story, I'm always worried may pacing is off . . . so I'm ecstatic if you think it timed/flowed well!