Comments | martinicruiser: Well whaddaya know. I wrote stuff.

vejiraziel in martinicruiser

Well whaddaya know. I wrote stuff.

May 15, 2011 02:33

Title: Bring Him Down (01/01)
Verse: Shattered Glass AU
Rating: NC-17 like seriously.
Words: 5288
Characters: Jazz, Ricochet.
Warnings: Violence, Non-con, twincest, sticky. Possibly triggering.
Summary: Ricochet's jealousy, rancor and obsession become too much to bear and he decides it's time to act and set a record straight.
Notes: I got a random ( Read more... )

jazz, sticky, shatteredglass, nc-17, non-con, ricochet

Comments 12

wicked3659 May 15 2011, 07:55:09 UTC

This is extremely well written and you capture the intensity of the situation brilliantly. Even in spite of the fact it was non con, I couldn't stop reading! I can't wait for more and to see Jazz bring about retribution on Ricochet. >:3

vejiraziel May 29 2011, 19:38:33 UTC

If I can get my damned muse back, I might write what happens next. Thank you for your encouragement and taking the time to review.

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vejiraziel May 29 2011, 19:41:42 UTC

If I can get the mood to write again, I hope I can write his revenge or whatever happens next. Thank you for commenting.

prowlsgirl May 15 2011, 15:55:32 UTC

I can tell even though he wasn't named that Prowl was the Decepticon Jazz liked.

vejiraziel May 29 2011, 19:42:27 UTC

Yeah. Ricochet just doesn't want to even think of his name.

d_lueth May 15 2011, 16:29:34 UTC

D:<

*quietly lines Ricochet up in a sniper scope*

I can't really say i liked the chapter without lying. :( Headspace Prowl was ready to make scrap fly halfway through, but you had great intensity and emotion. Poor Jazz D: He needs some Prowl lovins!

vejiraziel May 29 2011, 19:44:18 UTC

It's alright, this isn't exactly something I wrote to be liked. It's meant to be gritty and not-nice, and just an attempt to try to write something like this.

Thank you reading.

bluebirdsoaring May 15 2011, 21:46:42 UTC

Woah, your non-con is wicked intense!! I have to say a pet peeve of mine is how so many non-con pieces turn into dub-con or even relationship pieces. Rape just doesn't do that for me, so non-con while not my squick, has to fall into a certain place - it's powerful and not nice and we see how a character we care about responds to such a terrible experience. Nothing can make it better - the mind games make it even worse, and since I don't know much of SG, it's "educational" as well. I would never have guessed it was your first non-con you paced it so well. Your SG Jazz has a very interesting response, and I really found that very well done. I kept wondering about the Con being Prowl as well. Do you have side pieces with him and SG Jazz too?

vejiraziel May 29 2011, 22:08:55 UTC

I've never liked that some people don't treat non-con like what it is. It's not hot, it's not pretty, it's awful one way or another, and the morphing to dub-con and relationship pieces does turn me off as well. >_o;

I just wanted to write something like this and show it's not pretty, and if someone tells me it's hot when it's not meant to be, I'll admit it'd leave me with mixed feelings.

And yes, the Decepticon is Prowl, Ricochet just refuses to even think about his name.