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borgmama1of5 August 28 2011, 01:26:11 UTC
Very complex and disturbing story.

Your portrayal of Dean here is particularly interesting because he's not the uberconfident Dean we're used to seeing.

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marlowe78 August 28 2011, 12:52:58 UTC
Thanks :)

No, he's not uberconfident. He's sixteen and in way over his head, but he's trying to fake his way through life so nobody will notice how much issues are floating in him. And practice makes perfect, so the more he tells himself he's fine, the more he'll believe it.

Thank you for the comment, made me real happy :)

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purple_carpets August 28 2011, 07:36:22 UTC
Oooh, I really liked this! It's totally not what I expected back when I read that prompt the first time. But you're right, the fact that he couldn't help the other kid would be incredibly hard on Dean, maybe even worse than if he'd been raped himself *stares at pretty, broken boy*

Bravo!

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marlowe78 August 28 2011, 12:51:06 UTC
*beams*

I'm really happy you liked this. I didn't want our boy to be the real victim of something so horrible, but still be badly shaken. I'm so glad it worked that way.

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vambrace August 28 2011, 15:35:53 UTC
You got the psychology of this exactly right. Kudos!

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marlowe78 August 28 2011, 18:49:53 UTC
Thanks, I'm glad you think so :)

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rince1wind August 28 2011, 17:00:56 UTC
Good story; you 'captured' Dean at a new point, just before and when he gets a real sense of boundaries with people (as opposed to monsters) and the reality of danger he could be in with them himself. This story makes sense - no wonder he's comfortable enough the next time he's in a prison with Sam.

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marlowe78 August 28 2011, 18:52:09 UTC
Thanks for the comment. I'm glad you thought it worked.

I've always wanted to write Teen-Dean, and I have a certain idea in my head that'll be put to paper someday. But I'm really happy you think his characterization was believable here.

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mayalaen August 28 2011, 17:10:53 UTC
This was very well done! It's been said flat out and referred to in canon plenty of times, the whole monsters versus humans thing. Humans can be driven by so many things and are so cruel. If you don't wanna get in trouble or have a moral problem with hurting or killing a human, it's harder ( ... )

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marlowe78 August 28 2011, 18:48:36 UTC
Oh wow, thank you so much for that long and thoughtful comment!

I understand your desire to protect John ;-) And I actually agree: he'd never let Dean get in front of a judge. Too many trails left. But since the prompt asked for Dean to end up in prison, I kinda needed it. And in some way, I'd think he might have thought it useful.
After all, it was just theft for sweets and beer, nothing really important.

I liked putting Dean in a position where he ISN'T the main victim, but is still really shaken by it. It's in a way more interesting to play with that scenario than to let him be hurt himself.

Anyway, thank you for commenting.

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