[Story] The Everything Dance - RenIchi (OneShot)
Title: The Everything Dance
Rating: NC-17
Pairing: Renji/Ichigo
Warnings: Yaoi, lemons, voyeurism
Words: 2744
Summary: Renji shows off a few skills that have nothing to do with the battlefield. Thankfully, Ichigo approves, and shows off a few skills of his own. Oneshot.
Notes: Just a quick oneshot - I had toyed with the idea of a sexy dance ( Read more... )
Rating: NC-17
Pairing: Renji/Ichigo
Warnings: Yaoi, lemons, voyeurism
Words: 2744
Summary: Renji shows off a few skills that have nothing to do with the battlefield. Thankfully, Ichigo approves, and shows off a few skills of his own. Oneshot.
Notes: Just a quick oneshot - I had toyed with the idea of a sexy dance ( Read more... )
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Oh, let me count the ways...
"Because...all I can tell you...regardless...of what you think...I'm thinking...the two locations are connected. The first one doesn't even begin to react without the second. Without my heart...excitement is just...excitement. There's no joy in it. Does that get through to you well enough?"
I LOVE how you wrote that to express that sex without the LURVE just don't cut it the same way. >_<
"Demanding."
"Requesting."
"Sounds like a demand to me."
Simple - direct - hilarious - THEM. XD
This was far more intense, far more real to him - even without the actual body to go with it. This was soul against soul, need against need, fulfillment and desire trapping them both until they came to the proper resolution.
More real, the soul-to-soul... GAH! I am so happy... >_< !!!!!
As a RenIchi girl, gawd, THANK YOU. 8D
xoxo < ( ... )
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well, I liked the idea of some down and dirty sex but I didn't want to go without some indication that this was simply the addition of yumminess, not just a one-night stand-ish thing. I don't see Ichigo really being comfortable with that.
*squeaks* I was worried about having Ichigo come off as too weak, even though I love having him play the student to Renji's patient teacher... mmm..
Aww, I heart you bunches. You know how hard it is for me to write these two. :) <333333
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I love self play in stories -- the idea of Ichigo touching himself on his own is meh...but add Renji watching ...
I also wanted it a little dirty, a little rough, a little wild without losing the lovey moments. It sounds like I pulled that off okay.
a pb_c comment? *puts it on the shelf* :)
I have no idea why I even went with dancing, because *I* normally don't like it either. I guess I'm OK with it (from my view) because I tried to make it less about a "perfect" dance and more about 'this is something hot because it's Renji, and his energy makes it perfect enough'...
aww. *hugs* I'll probably post more stories here, but since I wrote this one in Word...omg it was a bitch getting it formatted!!?!!?!! -roar ( ... )
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Self-play... you know what I found so appealing about it here? The fact that he was kind of embarrassed to do it in front of Renji, but it kinda got to that point of "aww jeez I can't help myself"... and then of course, Renji encouraged it and Ichigo had that whole, really he thinks this is hot? attitude... well. You wrote it, I don't need to explain this to you XD
oh no, I always dig into my own stories for some reason. that's what I was hoping for -- I like when Ichigo is embarassed ... and I don't always see Ichigo aware of his own sexiness. Which is hot on its own...
:) <3 ya bunches, take care of yourself!
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It's like, it's clear to me as a reader, that they really like each other, and they know it too but, it's like they don't realise it until the end. So, through the whole story it went back and forth for me, between 'oh, this is hot' and 'aaaaah Renji! He says he wants all of you! As in all of you, realise what he means idiot!'
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LOL! I like that see-sawing motion -- it felt realistic to me -- ahh, been there done there. I was going for a playful story that had lots of ambiguity.
oh, Renji. XD Maybe he'll really absorb what that means? :)
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...and then the smexy times. :D I thought it was so funny that Ichigo tried to get away at first, and then that Renji followed, looking hungry. I really liked the interaction between the two of them, how Ichigo was so tentative at first until he realized that Renji really wanted him, and then he was into the idea. So sweet, and with how intense they both are about their relationships, it totally rang true.
Deliciously wonderful how Renji is trying to go kind of slow at first and Ichigo asks him to step it up. This line is total win, BTW:
I don't share and I don't know how to eat my food slowly, really. I can't look at how flushed and horny you look without wanting to really fuck you good and proper...
...so yummy and smexy and so wonderfully sweet at the end. Thanks for posting!
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Isn't Renji always hungry though? Like before Renji and Ichigo were on the same side, he always had this wolfish, hungry look on his face. I think that's when I fell in love with him. :)
The intensity of their relationship makes it hard to write them sometimes, I think. I'm getting better, but I sturggled so much with the characterization because they are intense about everything, as well as being impulsive as all get out.
I appreciate you wandering over :)
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