A Tale Told by an Idiot

[margo_kim]

Title: A Tale Told by an Idiot
Rating: Teen/Blue Cortina
Word Count: 1,360
Contains: Non-explicit violence, kidnapping, Sam/Gene
Summary: Eliot got things all mixed up. Your day starts with a bang and you whimper. God only knows how it ends.
Notes: Written for dakfinv for the prompt "Sam is missing, books, the phrase 'That's not blood. Is it?'"

Comments

[chamekke]

This is fucking AMAZING.

I'm speechless. Will come back when I have reread it a few more times and can formulate words. But really, it is *fantastic*. Tense and disturbing and wonderful.

BTW, this-- "when he saw you were good" --I think good should be gone?

[margo_kim]

Wow, you're fast. Thank you! :D I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

Ooh, good catch. That typo does make Gene sound a bit like he's God on the seventh day.

[dakfinv]

Oh, thank you so much! This is absolutely brilliant! I love how I think it's being told from Sam's perspective and then BAM it's Test Card Girl. And there are so many beautiful lines, too. I especially love...

...they’ve taken your jacket, your jacket, the only thing in this time you claim. You feel flayed without it.

And I loved how you worked in the line from the prompt. Gorgeous, gorgeous fic. Thank you, thank you, thank you!

[margo_kim]

Thank you, those were fantastic prompts. I'm thrilled you liked it :D You'll probably get some inadvertent extra fills out of this, considering this was the fourth story I started for this prompt. I've got to do something with those 5000 spare words floating around...

[basaltgrrl]

Oh. Really... wow. Uh... hard to find the words, because this is so AMAZING. In its own way, this has just stolen my mojo.

The way Sam's predicament is described in such bleak terms that I really didn't think to have hope, and then the shock of realizing that it isn't Sam's perspective... wow.

Love the final paragraph. A lot.

[margo_kim]

Thanks!

The way Sam's predicament is described in such bleak terms that I really didn't think to have hope

Not gonna lie, I thought of the Test Card Twist because I could think of no realistic way to get him out of that basement otherwise. Writing yourself into a corner provokes interesting results sometimes.

[severinne]

This is really smartly done, and really quite beautiful in its way. Normally I wouldn't have thought that the way you trick the POV could work but in this case, with the Test Card Girl and the privilege you've given her here of knowing Sam's innermost thoughts, it's actually very effective and creepy. And that last line in particular is just bloody amazing. Like, kinda want to have its babies level of amazing. *g*

[margo_kim]

Thanks! I was worried that the POV reveal would come off as a bit gimmicky, but I figured if you could get away with anyone it's the Test Card Girl. It's like how everyone says that Jack Harkness is the exception to every absolute statement about sex. She's like the Jack Harkness of horror--ridiculous but strangely effective.

[margo_kim]

Thank you. That's a great description of what I was going for. Love the icon, by the way. My biggest regret is that I couldn't fit the clown in somehow.