LOL, when I read the line about taking a break I nearly hit the roof. LOL, in fact I think a couple cause words flew through my head. Then I saw the last line.
As I was reading, I noticed my hand was over my heart, holding on as I read, just because it makes me feel so much. You are such a talented writer These were my 2 favorite parts:
I might as well choose someone I can tolerate, and it’s best that person knows about it as far in advance as possible so that in the interim he doesn’t do anything unsavory to fuck it up and force me to go through the process of finding someone else.
Death makes people melodramatic. It magnifies everything. Circumstances matter, too. You think there’d be this much kerfuffle if I’d died by choking on a sweet?
I worried somewhat that readers would react negatively to DG's conversation with Gerald Umbrey, that they'd see it as her trying to move on too quickly, or that she wouldn't be that cold and calculating. I hoped that it would show that although she's gotten in closer touch with her feelings at this point, Cain's death really has broken her in a way that even she is not totally aware of yet, and in fact her proposal to Gerald was a way for her to keep herself from healing.
Which of course she won't actually need to do, so it's moot. But whatevs.
Besides... how often do you get to use the word kerfuffle in a sentence? That word is right up there with Fliberdygibbit, Gyre, Blatherskite, Codswallop, Scofflaw, and Lackadaisical.
I was the predictable one. I worry, not that DG is somehow moving on too quickly, you illustrate how broken she is so wonderfully... I worry about Cain's reaction when he learns of this.
This is how I saw it....Even though she's been crying, I think you perfectly captured the larger part of her that is still numb. The 2 opposing sides of her grief and duty are moderated by her personality to let her know what are the straws that will completely break her back...and that's one of them...to go through a similar experience to find a new Consort...the same way she "chose" Cain would just be too much to think about every day and be able to put on a public face to continue to lead the country. She's doing what she has to do to get through it. I think you exactly showed that she is much more in touch with her feelings.
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Leave it to Cain to always find a white horse to ride to the rescue on.
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You can find, and grab, them here: http://n-e-star.livejournal.com/124997.html
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Maybe I'll just take tomorrow off posting. You know, give myself a break. Let the anticipation BUILD.
Kidding.
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I might as well choose someone I can tolerate, and it’s best that person knows about it as far in advance as possible so that in the interim he doesn’t do anything unsavory to fuck it up and force me to go through the process of finding someone else.
Death makes people melodramatic. It magnifies everything. Circumstances matter, too. You think there’d be this much kerfuffle if I’d died by choking on a sweet?
Everything you write is so true...
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Which of course she won't actually need to do, so it's moot. But whatevs.
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I was the predictable one. I worry, not that DG is somehow moving on too quickly, you illustrate how broken she is so wonderfully... I worry about Cain's reaction when he learns of this.
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