BPS Secret Santa - "The Christmas Stranger" (1/?) for GeekMama

[luvvycat]

Title: "The Christmas Stranger" (1/?)
Author:   
Written for:  
Characters/Pairing:  Young Will Turner/Young Elizabeth Swann
Rating: PG
Warnings: Some doxy suggestiveness and minor violence in Parts 2 (and possibly 3).
Disclaimer:  PotC is Disney's, not mine (darn it!)
Author's Notes:  In response to GeekMama's request "J/E (etc. ?) at Christmas; or young

Comments

[sharklady35]

The kids' interaction was wonderfully spot-on, and Will's description of his Mum was touching. As was this:

> He felt his cheeks flush pink with pleasure. He found himself doing that a lot lately in her presence, and it mystified him... some subtle, intangible metamorphosis had taken place within him in recent months, along with the gradual deepening of his voice and the lengthening of his limbs. <

Ah, the traumas of puberty.

> ...let's see, what did the Lieutenant call them?" She stood ramrod-straight, hands clasped behind her back, nose in the air and, lowering her voice, affected a very close approximation of Norrington's cool, mellifluous upper-class accent, "-'toad-eating sycophants, seeking to curry the Governor's favour.'" <

I absolutely loved that bit!

I'm assuming there's more chapters to come, and that nothing truly bad will happen to the kids. I've a suspicion who the 'stranger' will be... if so, Will's confidence in his character-assessment ability may be a tad mistook.

Looking forward to more!

[luvvycat]

The kids' interaction was wonderfully spot-on, and Will's description of his Mum was touching.

Thanks so much for saying so! I always thought that, early on, his and Elizabeth's strongest bond would have been that they both had lost their mothers (truly a life-altering experience for a child to go through).

Ah, the traumas of puberty.

And poor Will, having to stumble through and cope with the process by his onesies, with no father (or father figure) around to clue him in on those peculiar changes, and let him know what to expect!

> ...let's see, what did the Lieutenant call them?" She stood ramrod-straight, hands clasped behind her back, nose in the air and, lowering her voice, affected a very close approximation of Norrington's cool, mellifluous upper-class accent, "-'toad-eating sycophants, seeking to curry the Governor's favour.'" <

I absolutely loved that bit!I could see Elizabeth's sense of snarkiness developing at an early age. And it's such a thoroughly normal thing for adolescents to do -- poking fun at authority

Thank you!!!!

[geekmama]

What a wonderful gift!

My favorite bit...

Suddenly, her smile wasn't just a smile, it was the sun shining upon him, warming him inside and out. The sound of her laughter was like the trilling of silver bells, musical, delightful. And the merest touch of her hand, the sweet regard of her dark amber eyes had the power to make his heart flutter with joy, and tie his tongue into knots.

Just perfect, and the rest is too, really, you've given such a heartwarming picture of the two of them, inhabiting such different worlds, but connected in so many ways.

I am very much looking forward to the next part!!

Re: Thank you!!!!

[luvvycat]

What a wonderful gift!

I'm so glad you like it, so far! :-)

Just perfect, and the rest is too, really, you've given such a heartwarming picture of the two of them, inhabiting such different worlds, but connected in so many ways.

Poor Will! Having to face the rigours of puberty, without a father to counsel him on the process! Never having been an adolescent male myself, I hope I've described his "inner changes" as well as his outer ones accurately! ;-)

There's such rich history there between Will and Elizabeth to tap into, bonds forged by the things they had in common, and a sweet devotion to one another in spite of the differences in social status. I can see her being wilful and impulsive as a child (as she is in her adult life!), and Will, out of concern for her, trying to temper that flightiness with a cooler head and a dose of common sense.

I am very much looking forward to the next part!!I'll be posting part 2 (and possibly part 3?) sometime today. Unfortunately, after two days of cooking, baking, and entertaining family

[pearlseed]

Hey totally wonderful and you hit nail solidly on the head about the physical, emotional changes of babies to bigs. Elisabeth as a mimic was hilarious! Love the remembrance of his mama--and can't wait to see who and what!! How cool--love the story and how you've writ the youngers.

[luvvycat]

Hey totally wonderful and you hit nail solidly on the head about the physical, emotional changes of babies to bigs.

Having only gone through the female version of puberty, I'm hoping I've gotten it right, from the male perspective of same! Glad you think that it rings true! :-)

Elisabeth as a mimic was hilarious!

Thanks! It's something I could see her doing ... making a bit of fun of Norrington (especially after he tried to puncture her little fantasy balloon about pirates! I sort of think she still held the "short drop, and a sudden stop" comment against him!).

Love the remembrance of his mama--

I could see how (with Bootstrap absent for most of his life) Will got his sense of values and morality from his mother; her sharing their meagre Christmas meal with someone less fortunate would have been a supremely charitable act, given how little they had themselves, and something likely to have stuck with Will, over the years, as an example of his mother's goodness.

...and can't wait to see who and what!! All will be revealed in

[compassrose7577]

Lizzie had a way of leading Will off into things he knew better than to do even back then. The poor boy--err, man--no, still boy--has no idea what's in store, does he?

This is a really nice examination into all the awkwardness of blooming hormones, and a blooming relationship. It'll be fun to see where this all leads.

[luvvycat]

Lizzie had a way of leading Will off into things he knew better than to do even back then. The poor boy--err, man--no, still boy--has no idea what's in store, does he?

Oh, yes indeedy ... Lizzie's will, combined with male teenage hormones ... poor Will doesn't stand a chance! ;-)

This is a really nice examination into all the awkwardness of blooming hormones, and a blooming relationship.

I always thought that's the strength of Will's and Elizabeth's relationship ... that they started out as best friends first, and the love developed out of that. I'm surprised that more fanfic hasn't been devoted to this duo, pre-CotBP!

It'll be fun to see where this all leads.

I hope to post Part 3 soon! Glad you're liking the story so far! Thank you so much for reading, and taking the time to Comment! :-)

-- Cat

[luvvycat]

That was WONDERFUL! Very heart-warming. You write them is such a thoughtful, cheerful way... it's fantastic to read and it makes their future mutual attachment make so much more sense.

Thank you so much! I always thought that they would have started out as playmates and best friends first, and the attraction would have crept in later (to paraphrase Jack, puberty has a way of reshuffling one's priorities!) ;-)

I've said it before, but I'm surprised that there hasn't been more fannish backstory written about this young pair. I find them totally enchanting, and if I weren't such a devoted Sparrabether, and convinced of the J/E dynamic, I'd be rooting for them as a couple!

Loved it! & I just hope they won't get in too much trouble ^^

Yes, well, there wouldn't be much of a story, then, if they didn't get into trouble, eh? And how much is "too much"? ;-)

Thank you again for the lovely comments! I'm so glad you're enjoying the story so far!

-- Cat