One-Shot, Spinning

[luvmeanddespair]

Title: Spinning
Author: luvmeanddespair
Rating: PG-13
Pairing: SiHan, HanChul
Summary: Han Geng spins, and all Siwon can do is watch.
A/N: First time writing/posting Super Junior.

Comments

[dear_whimsy]

Wow. This is kind of gorgeous. I'm going to apologize in advance for the poor comment to come, and I claim the late hour as an excuse. > <

He spins
First off, the repetition was beautiful. It really set the mood. Often times I think there's the possibility of it getting stagnant or whatever, but it fit absolutely beautiful here. And the break in the pattern: He stops. and immediately followed up by the reverse - it's a little breathtaking.

The characterizations were well-done too. I thought you captured Hankyung's habitual sweetness but strong stage personality very well, and Heechul was, well, Heechul.

They spin, the both of them-and it makes you so dizzy that you’re sick.
A dazzling, bittersweet, aching kind of line to end on. I never liked Siwon as much as the others. But you - this made me feel for him.

I hope we see more from you! <3

[luvmeanddespair]

Don't apologize! I'm very flattered!

I know what you mean by the repetion getting old, and I'm glad it doesn't seem that way.

I did Heechul well? Yay. I wasn't sure if I was getting him right because honestly, Heechul still creeps me out. A little less since he's started looking like a boy, but really, he was just supposed to ninja in and out and instead... he took over.

^_^;; Thanks!

[aswindblows]

They spin, the both of them-and it makes you so dizzy that you’re sick.

It's awesome how that one line ties everything up so nicely, matching the tone and the vocab used and I really like it, even though it's sad for Siwon, but I really like the beginning part as well, I was holding my breath!

:)

Really nice work!!

[luvmeanddespair]

I do feel bad about Siwon. *pets him* But I've been in a horrible angst-writing way lately...

I'm glad you liked it! ^_^

[luvmeanddespair]

I know, I'm cruel to him. I'm glad you liked it, though :)

[arina_shinh]

i feel bad for shiwon...
aww... i really need the fluffy shihan, kinda miss them two...
but wow!! love hanchul too...
the way you describe the movement,
hangeng with his shyness, heechul with his awkwardness to dance...
I love this...
definitely love this...

[luvmeanddespair]

I'm glad you love it so much. ^_^

Thanks for reading!

[risabet]

They way you wrote this really had an impact, I got dizzy just reading this! Creating images is one thing, turning words into feelings is one step beyond that. You managed both beautifully.

[luvmeanddespair]

Oh, wow, thank you so much. I'm glad you liked it. :)