Be my Prince Charming? Chapter 1: Twenty-three times

[luvdaisuke]

Hey, this is my first fanfiction or story, as you call it. This story has the Hey!Say!Jump members, but mostly Yuto. This story will not consist of Mary Sues, and in dept OC's.These new characters I put into this story is for you fangirls, to put yourself into their shoes. So you can squeal all you want without feeling jealous xD These characters

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[cookierulez]

FIRST COMMENT, BECAUSE I ROCK. =D

[cookierulez]

okay, time for actual porno music/comment time (lmao, couldn't resist the urge to type that, blame nat xD; )

first of all, I FREAKING LOVE YOU. but try to connect the two parts more~~ ^__^

your main character is so cute!!! ^^ she's so easy to like~ ... or maybe i just know who to imagine her as that makes her so easy to like? xD;
Sally is also a good character~ (someday, you gotta draw her for me *_*) & her name fits her personality, too! she's the one that the main character talks about everything to, right?

story: so far so good =D ganbare~

one more thing, can i be your editor, please? please please please please???
... oh, well, i'm doing it anyway 8D

charactor is spelt character

As he took a sip of the drink, I stared and tried to keep myself from squealing with exitement. is spelt excitement

The first thing I did was to run to the convience store to buy the drink. is spelt convenience

I decided. I'm going to make Nakajima Yuto my Price Charming....
... self explanitory? xD; Prince

"Remember to be carefull" Daiki said.

[cookierulez]

oh, two more:

Chinen looks at his friends with a defeated look and finnaly stammers out. is spelt finally

and

Yuto slided closer to Chinen. is spelt slid. but slided is a cool word @_@

[yuki_san2519]

this sounds interesting- i can like totally imagine myself as the main character! XD

[luvdaisuke]

ahaha xD Thanks >w

[daintyxdoll]

This seems so interesting! I can't believe I didn't read it before!! Going to read more!!
I can totally imagine myself doing this!
awesome writing!! love it~

[luvdaisuke]

Hahaha! Thank you so much~ XD I'm almost done it... O_O... LOL XD

YAAAY~ Thank youu! XD

[daintyxdoll]

really? this really cute I think! I even love the title!! Love it!!

you're welcome love! this is so sweet! XD

[luvdaisuke]

HEHE~ THANK YOUUU! XD

hehe~ XD