Be my Prince Charming? Chapter 1: Twenty-three times
Hey, this is my first fanfiction or story, as you call it. This story has the Hey!Say!Jump members, but mostly Yuto. This story will not consist of Mary Sues, and in dept OC's.These new characters I put into this story is for you fangirls, to put yourself into their shoes. So you can squeal all you want without feeling jealous xD These characters
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first of all, I FREAKING LOVE YOU. but try to connect the two parts more~~ ^__^
your main character is so cute!!! ^^ she's so easy to like~ ... or maybe i just know who to imagine her as that makes her so easy to like? xD;
Sally is also a good character~ (someday, you gotta draw her for me *_*) & her name fits her personality, too! she's the one that the main character talks about everything to, right?
story: so far so good =D ganbare~
one more thing, can i be your editor, please? please please please please???
... oh, well, i'm doing it anyway 8D
charactor is spelt character
As he took a sip of the drink, I stared and tried to keep myself from squealing with exitement. is spelt excitement
The first thing I did was to run to the convience store to buy the drink. is spelt convenience
I decided. I'm going to make Nakajima Yuto my Price Charming....
... self explanitory? xD; Prince
"Remember to be carefull" Daiki said. spelt careful (single L)
"....Please,,,?" Yuto pouted. (AWWW Yuto, why so cute~~ <3 xD;) ... instead of ,,,
"AW COMMON" spelt c'mon.
^_^ done~ i would edit it directly to the post for you, but i can't change your posts xD;;;
looking forward to more, mika~~
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Chinen looks at his friends with a defeated look and finnaly stammers out. is spelt finally
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Yuto slided closer to Chinen. is spelt slid. but slided is a cool word @_@
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