Nanny Position

[lubbins]

I've been playing with the idea of becoming a live-in nanny. Here is the letter that I have created to send to potential families. Try to read it like you have kids (maybe you already do) and you are looking for a nanny...tell me if it sounds like you would want to contact me:

Hello

Comments

[starrrie]

A++ letter! :)

I would only change two small grammatical things: "I think that having the time to work with a small amount of children" I would change to "a small number of children"

and

"to provide with 10 three year olds" to provide for 10 three year olds"

[lubbins]

great tips! thanks for checking it out hun:)

[fuerve]

Sounds decent. I'd probably be okay with asking you in for an interview, based solely upon this letter.

[lubbins]

sweet!

[karmaeleon]

I like the message in your letter, and if you want some specific pointers, a good friend of mine is a nanny and she writes her own contracts as well as works with a service if you'd like me to hook you up with her!

peace and livluv
shawna

[lubbins]

thanks hun for the input. i may just take you up on that offer to speak with your friend, maybe I could get their email address?

[karmaeleon]

skorpaztie@hotmail.com

Tie is her name..I'll let her know you might be in touch?

[nicolemarieh]

Here's my tips, I wont be offended if you disagree! Also, I have this thing with "editing" where I love to do it, so please excuse me for getting carried away, and *please do* use your discretion in choosing which of my suggestions to use. I am not intending to re-write your whole letter for you... I just get carried away with ideas and suggestions. 0=)

( I'm putting them in a new comment because its kinda long :X )

Good luck, I really hope you find something that works out for you !! =)

[nicolemarieh]

(my legal name is Sarah, but I prefer Yoshimi)
Leave this out, and save it for the interview. Or, perhaps you could get your name legally changed so you wouldnt have to worry about it? If thats not an option beforehand, just leave it as Yoshimi and explain later that it is your preferred nickname, (and perhaps that you will be legally changing it soon) if questions are asked.

1 year working with school-aged children
I would change this to "working with elementary school children", or something that is more specific to the age range rather then just "school-aged".

In your references to time spent with the differing age groups, you should spell out "one" rather then putting "1". It is correct structure and thus looks more professional.

with 3's and 4's as a preschool teacher
I would change this to "with three and four year olds" as a preschool teacher.

I've spent the past 5 months traveling
"five" months

I've spent the past 5 months traveling to different organic farms to learn about organic gardening and other sustainable methods