Comments | lrig_rorrim: Barefoot, uphill, both ways.

lrig_rorrim

Barefoot, uphill, both ways.

Jul 15, 2012 20:53

Jesse “Snake” Barrett, so named for the snake tattoo across the knuckles of his right hand, was in a pretty tight spot. He sat in the stolen car, slurping noisily from an oversized fountain drink and tapping his fingers on the steering wheel as the rain tapped down on the windshield, trying to figure a way out. He needed money, and he needed it ( Read more... )

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n3m3sis42 July 16 2012, 18:01:16 UTC

Ohhhhhhh wow. You create such detailed plots and it never ceases to amaze me. Really enjoyed the story and also your creatively literal interpretation of the topic. :D

lrig_rorrim July 16 2012, 18:27:09 UTC

:D I'm really glad you liked it! I knew that I wanted to do some sort of spatial trap as soon as I saw the prompt, but figuring out how to make it work was kind of tricky.

myrna_bird July 16 2012, 22:13:51 UTC

Uncle Eli and Uncle Levi, in last paragraph? The same:( I'm assuming typo unless I really missed something.
I love this dilemma and I kept thinking of a gerbil running and getting no where. I also like the use of the mirrors, especially because of you user name-backwards. It seemed a very approprite entry from you! :)

lrig_rorrim July 16 2012, 22:18:38 UTC

Aiii! Curse you, find and replace, for failing me. Thank you for catching that. I don't feel too terrible for fixing that one.

I'm really glad you enjoyed this! And yeah, it is a rather appropriate offering from me. :) One of these days I'll post the poem I wrote which inspired me to choose this name. One of these days, but not today. ;)

myrna_bird July 16 2012, 23:32:57 UTC

We will just have to be patient, then. ;)

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lrig_rorrim July 18 2012, 23:05:20 UTC

Thank you! :D I'm really glad you liked it!

alycewilson July 17 2012, 13:59:53 UTC

Whoa. I liked how this worked out; the fact that he got a chance to avoid his fate but was too greedy to walk out before he got trapped.

lrig_rorrim July 18 2012, 23:06:22 UTC

Yeah, Snake really should have walked away when he still could... I don't think Uncle Eli was expecting him to, though. I'm glad you liked this! :)

alycewilson July 18 2012, 23:15:39 UTC

It was a fresh view of magic: the idea that he could control people through mirrors. Of course, it makes sense, as mirrors have long been considered doorways to other worlds.

karmasoup July 19 2012, 18:47:23 UTC

I'm a sucker for a good mythological comeuppance. ;)

lrig_rorrim July 19 2012, 18:48:21 UTC

*grins* How about a good comeupupupupuppance? ;) I'm glad you liked it!