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lozenger8

The Long Way Home

Feb 12, 2009 23:59

Title: The Long Way Home
Fandom: Life on Mars
Rating: PG
Word Count: 4000+ words.
Notes: Sam/Annie (break up), Sam/Gene. So, it turns out discovering ‘Solitary Man’ was Diamond and not Cash was perfect, because the Neil Diamond song this title is taken from is basically this story. This is a follow on from A Solitary Man .
Summary: Should he dare ( Read more... )

rated pg, slash, writing, life on mars, medium

Comments 29

bistokids February 14 2009, 17:25:50 UTC

Oh, you are just ridiculously excellent! Not only is your Sam and Gene dialogue far and away the best in the business (seriously, if I didn't have evidence to the contrary I'd be deeply suspicious that you might be Matthew Graham - there are so many perfect interactions between them that quoting just isn't feasible), but - hang on, this sentence is getting out of control.

But I find it astonishing, and so very pleasing, that this long after the finale, such a completely satisfying post 2.08 fic can come about. Really, brilliant. Taking the story on in a way that smacks of canon all the way.

Anyway, quite liked this, ta. ♥♥♥

lozenger8 February 15 2009, 00:30:39 UTC

♥

If I were MG, I'd be a kinky little thing. :D

Thank you! There's, erm, another part that sort of changes everything. And now I'm feeling bad because of everyone's reactions to these two.

clonesgirl February 15 2009, 14:08:29 UTC

This is great. I love the progression of the relationships in it, the endings and the tentative beginnings. Also killed myself laughing at Gene's opinion of Australians. It's just so Gene that I could imagine MG himself might have written it.

Thank you and hope there'll be more like this. :)

lozenger8 February 15 2009, 14:13:00 UTC

I winced writing that line, but I had to balance out nice!Gene, and there's nothing like making him say something thoroughly despicable to do so. Oh, Gene. Your way with words is truly brilliant, in a disgusting kind of way.

Thank you!

There is more. But not quite like this. Um. :D

This is obviously doomed to fail... jantalaimon February 16 2009, 16:54:30 UTC

...but out of a fic full of wonderful moments, here are a few of my favourites:

Unexpectedly, Sam’s newfound sanity is a burden on his love-life. Understandably, he doesn’t much mind.

AND THEN I started to picture an Annie/Sam/Gene romantic comedy. Because, you know, Sam and Bridget Jones are totally like this. >3

Gene stands, taking his camel-hair coat from his chair and dragging it on. “You sicken me, Tyler.” He shakes his head. “Are you really that much of a fairy, or is it a case of the more you have to say, the smaller the pencil?”

“You’ve seen it, you tell me.”

“No chance. I’ve a knack of blocking out mind-shattering experiences.”

“Mind-shattering? My God, you make it sound like you were full of awe.”

“No. It was an entirely different kind of awful.”And the magic of Loz!dialogue is at it again. I swear sometimes that you must have the two of them locked up in your wardrobe, ready to banter at your bidding while you take notes. Or, like BK said, you're secretly MG. Or MG's secretly you. I think I like that last bit ( ... )

Re: This is obviously doomed to fail... lozenger8 February 17 2009, 08:17:17 UTC

Bwahahaha. It totally does sound like a romantic comedy tagline. It was Sam being self-mocking, so I can see why.

But ... what do you mean MG's secretly me? I don't like that idea one little bit.

The end of this was originally TOTALLY OMINOUS and then I thought, "No. That's cruel." So the third story starts with that scene instead. Meanwhile, I've taken Try a Little Tenderness back up. And I thought I'd get away from writing LoM fic.

Thank you. ♥ ♥ ♥

Re: This is obviously doomed to fail... jantalaimon February 17 2009, 13:34:48 UTC

Bwahahaha. It totally does sound like a romantic comedy tagline. It was Sam being self-mocking, so I can see why.

It almost makes me want to write such a thing. Almost. >3

But ... what do you mean MG's secretly me? I don't like that idea one little bit.

OK. Here's the thing. Whilst MG is obviously quite brilliant when he wants to be, the key is in the 'when he wants to be' part. As we discussed regarding the first part of this fic, he does a bit of willful avoidance, too. Which is troubling on a lot of levels. And not to say that you don't, because I don't know what you avoid, do I? Not well enough to make presumptions, anyway. :) There are a lot of clever and good dialogue writers in this fandom, but there aren't many who consistently manage to wrangle things that feel exactly like they could have been in the show the way you do. So obviously, you've got the ability to think along at least some of the same pathways he does. But I'd argue that you're the more honest writer---with yourself, and with us as readers/ ( ... )