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lozenger8

The Long Way Home

Feb 12, 2009 23:59

Title: The Long Way Home
Fandom: Life on Mars
Rating: PG
Word Count: 4000+ words.
Notes: Sam/Annie (break up), Sam/Gene. So, it turns out discovering ‘Solitary Man’ was Diamond and not Cash was perfect, because the Neil Diamond song this title is taken from is basically this story. This is a follow on from A Solitary Man .
Summary: Should he dare ( Read more... )

rated pg, slash, writing, life on mars, medium

Comments 29

slash4femme February 12 2009, 16:08:17 UTC

I really enjoyed this, your pacing and characterization of Sam are wonderful.

lozenger8 February 12 2009, 16:38:29 UTC

Thank you!

lunadeath02 February 12 2009, 16:34:39 UTC

This was so lovely, and the build up was perfect.

I'm American so I probably wouldn't understand, but what does Gene mean when he says: "You're cut... you're well cut." ?

I'm not sure I understand that ordeal about the letter either. (Of course, I could just re-read it too)

Still, this was a great read. So in character and the ending was perfect!

lozenger8 February 12 2009, 16:38:02 UTC

Cut means 'drunk', 'well cut' means 'really drunk'.

In A Solitary Man, Sam's in 2006 and discovers Gene's left him notes on the backs of photographs and within a folder he gave to Phyllis for safekeeping. In the one that pushes Sam over the edge (quite literally), he writes that he knew something was up when Morgan didn't know where he was.

Thank you :D

lunadeath02 February 12 2009, 16:44:29 UTC

Thanks.

Oh, guess I should pay more attention to notes. XD I usually read things in order, but I failed to notice that in your notes. Sorry about that. ^^

gritsinmisery February 12 2009, 17:21:12 UTC

I love your Sam and your Gene and your bon mots... Reading this and snarking at bit after bit, I feel like Shakespeare with the Tenth Doctor: "I'll have that one. And that one..."

lozenger8 February 12 2009, 22:13:23 UTC

Thank you! I love writing dialogue for these two so much.

mikes_grrl February 12 2009, 18:20:23 UTC

This is really nice, and of course you have Sam and Gene's snarky dialog down perfectly *insert jealous sighhhh* but why I really liked this is here:
Sam thinks he’d probably going to get attacked by the WI for the rampant objectification, but at least he tried to be poetic about it.

Throughout this story you really managed to show Sam as a modern man in the crazy world he landed in. Those touches are so easily lost in writing Sam as eager to be 'back in time' but you did a wonderful job of keeping that flavor of Sam without bludgeoning the reader with it.

And honestly? A VERY romantic story! Thank you!

lozenger8 February 12 2009, 22:03:03 UTC

Thanks so much, Mikey!

I felt I had to show that Sam, despite his choice, could never fully assimilate into 1973 --- he just doesn't think the same as everyone around him. And yet, he deals with that a lot better in 1973 than he did in 2006.

And yes, especially considering I wrote this, this is pretty romantic. No doom and gloom, just, you know, love.

walkerbaby February 12 2009, 18:46:23 UTC

I think this is my favorite post-2.08 fic ever!! definitely going in the memories.

lozenger8 February 12 2009, 22:07:45 UTC

♥ Thank you! I'm really glad you liked it.