I thought Ayu's death scene was a beautiful touch, and the ending with Mai and Naru was well written. I only noticed one typo, "The bag led a lot of old money." was probably supposed to be "held a lot of old money."
Of course now I am rooting for your next story to start soon. Excellent job. I appreciate the great ending to my Monday!
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Of course now I am rooting for your next story to start soon. Excellent job. I appreciate the great ending to my Monday!
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