Remix of Cesare: Direction

[remix_mod]

Title: Direction
Author: Dee (cupiscent)
Original story: " Glance" by Cesare (almostnever)
Pairing: Orli/Dom
Rating: Adult (themes, language, sex)
Summary: It would be easier if there was someone to tell you what to do, but in the end, you have to decide which way you're facing.

Disclaimer: This is a non-profit, non-commercial work of fiction using the names and

Comments

[juke_box_dive]

This is quite hard and I quite like it. Reaches him. Crowds him back against the porcelain sink. Bites the corner of his mouth, yanks him an inch the right way by his hair, kisses him properly. Kisses him like he's a sharp edge and Orlando needs more than anything to slice himself open. I could read those lines for a week.

[cupiscent]

Thank you! It's really nice to hear, especially since it's been so long since I played in this sandbox. "Hard" is where I like to live, so YAY. Thanks!

[almostnever]

Wow, I love how you turned this around and expanded it and matched the tone and somehow even alluded, at the end, to the next bit of it-- which I never wrote! (Story of my Lotrips life.)

the tiles cutting cold lines into his knees through his jeans

So many great details like this. Excellent.

[cupiscent]

I am really pleased that you liked this! Obviously it's always a bit of a nailbite when messing with someone else's stories, but I'm also waaaaay out of practice at remixing in general and these boys in particular, and I was a little worried I was wedging too much into the cracks and shifting it in unwelcome directions. I laughed out loud to hear that the "next bit" was in the general vicinity of what I was contemplating. Hi-five!

And thanks. Coming back to these boys was great, and working with your stories was a pleasure!

[foxrafer]

his mind wipes itself Pavlovianly white with broad strokes of desirous fantasy.

it's the slide of steel on naked steel, the sparks of swordplay.

I feel I should know this phrasing but it's eluding me right now. *g* I thought this was a brilliant fic, full of tension and just as raw as the original. A perfect compliment to "Glance," matching tone and uncertainty.

[cupiscent]

*tips hat* Why thank you! I'm really glad to hear you think I did justice to the original, because that was a really nice suckerpunch of a fic.

[stormatdusk]

like he's a sharp edge and Orlando needs more than anything to slice himself open

tiles cutting cold lines into his knees

this is all throbby and painful and you just want to keep it covered, bandage it up, because it hurts to have it exposed to the air, somehow. very nicely done.

[cupiscent]

That's just sort of precisely what I was aiming at, so I'm going to have a little moment of victory. *G* Thanks so much!

[giselleslash]

Wow. This is really fantastic - all sharpness and grit. I love that. It's gorgeously written, it just pulses.