I love you

[lorib12]

Each morning I rise; a few pleasant moments of belief that life is what it should be.

Wipe sleep from dry eyes, focus my thoughts that come flowing back to remind me of a new day in hell.  To dream of something more; to hope for what life was like before.

Before the needing, the wanting, the pretending.  My life before life actually began.

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Comments

[yarroway]

That's just heart-breakingly beautiful.

[lorib12]

Sorry it took so long to get back to you. Thanks for such the kind words, you really have no idea how much they mean to me. I really needed to hear (or read) them after actually putting the poem down. Thank you:)

[fourleggedfish]

I can feel the emotion in that! I also like the way you wrote it, sort of a stream of consciousness but there's a certain cadence to it and just enough rhyme to sort of grab at the reader's attention. The questioning and the confusion and sadness just comes through so poignantly. :(

[lorib12]

Thanks! I cried a bit when I wrote it. I changed it so many times, I think each change came with each additional pint at the bar. It did, however make me happy in the end because even if I can't say these things I can write them and they'll always be there. Thanks for the feed back and hopefully I'll get some H/W up soon-writer God willing!