There was a lot to be said for the challenge of being an attorney. There was a thrill in the fight, the battle to win justice for your side. It was exhilarating and absolutely marvelous
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LENGTH AND TENSES. LENGTH AND TENSES. LENGTH AND TENSES.m0nsterfaceMay 14 2011, 23:31:59 UTC
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In all honesty, I had no idea that the main character was a lawyer until the second-to-last paragraph. I can't make heads or tails of that first paragraph, especially the very first sentence. It seemed to be implying that he regularly fought against the law, but it wasn't very clear. I like your descriptions of that exciting feeling it gave him, but we also need some more concrete details thrown in there, so that we know exactly what it is he's doing that makes him so excited.
Second paragraph is just right. Don't change a thing <3
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In all honesty, I had no idea that the main character was a lawyer until the second-to-last paragraph. I can't make heads or tails of that first paragraph, especially the very first sentence. It seemed to be implying that he regularly fought against the law, but it wasn't very clear. I like your descriptions of that exciting feeling it gave him, but we also need some more concrete details thrown in there, so that we know exactly what it is he's doing that makes him so excited.
Second paragraph is just right. Don't change a thing <3 ( ... )
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