Star Trek Fic: Ghosts

[lizzie_marie_23]

Title: Ghosts
Characters: Winona Kirk, Jim Kirk, Christopher Pike, Sam Kirk, George Kirk
Word Count: 4867
Summary: George is still present for Jim and Chris even though he's dead.
Notes: written for scripps several months ago, and I'm finally getting around to posting it.

Comments

[caramelsilver]

Oh, this was really good. I really liked it. You captured their voices, and the story flowed really well.

Can I make one suggestion? That you make proper paragraphs, on the internet it's much easier to read when the text isn't a giant wall, with only inches to tell them apart.

All in all, I really enjoyed this story. I really liked all the little details=)

[lizzie_marie_23]

Thanks so much! I'm glad this flowed well, and it was really fun to come up with details to make the characters come to life.

Re: the paragraphs. Oh dear, you're really right. I swear it didn't look that hard to read when I was posting it. Going off to fix that now :)

[samueljames]

Still beautiful and I loved the shared moment between Pike and Jim, realising that they both miss George. Jim's anger at Starfleet is understandable but I'm glad he was inspired by George and love the idea of George not having regrets.

[lizzie_marie_23]

That moment was really the starting point for my writing this whole story, because they're connected by this whether they realize it or not. So I had to get them to talk to each other because that would give them some kind of closure, or at least a new starting place.

Thanks for reviewing and being an inspiration while I was working on it. It really means alot to me.

[samueljames]

You're welcome. Not sure if you want to promote this in any communities but pike_2009 might like it.

[lizzie_marie_23]

Cool, thanks for the tip! Do I need to be a member to promote it?

[adafrog]

Lovely, thanks.