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liralen

Winter War: Ensemble: Retaking Seireitei

Oct 06, 2010 14:13

Title: Ensemble: Retaking Seireitei
Series: Winter War
Characters: Sasakibe, Soi Fong, Ganju, Kuukaku, Kuchiki Ginrei, Ikkanzaka Jidanbou
Rating/Warnings: PG-13, language and violence
Summery: The Seireitei crew gets to work after Gin leaves the city.
Disclaimer: I do not own Bleach or its characters. I make no money from these writings.
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fanfic, winter_war, bleach

Comments 27

darth_veyda October 6 2010, 21:03:27 UTC

Wow ^_^

I longed for this chapter more than I could possibly say, and it is GREAT ^_^ Sasakibe had his long-deserved moment of glory, and Soi Fon is gorgeous as usual, and Shibas are so... themselves ^_^

And I really adore the way you put minor characters into the story.

Thank you so much ^_^

liralen October 6 2010, 21:52:23 UTC

You're very welcome!! I'm very glad you enjoyed it, and yes, it's fun to have them each have their moments.

The Shibas certainly are distinct. Whew.

Thanks for the lovely comment!

archangelbeth October 6 2010, 21:07:46 UTC

(Because I am an editor, some edits... (I have to edit! Or else they niggle at me and I can't enjoy! So I edit and enjoy at the same time. O:D)
Shiba siblings, Ganju and Kuukaku[,]
the low voice, tired but still powerful[,]
old solder (soldier)
gist of most of the conversations were (this is a UK/American break, I believe; the American requires the verb to agree with "gist," so "was." I believe the UK allows the verb to agree with "conversations," thus "were.")
we can do," she said[.] "Take
Go on, Brother[.] we (otherwise it's a comma-splice, a comma connecting two complete sentences.)
into the air: he landed (another UK/American difference; that's the UK usage. The American one would have a semi-colon. Do I know who one of your major beta-readers is, or what? O;D ) )

until they were touching foreheads and breathing each other’s breath --Mmmm, nice image! I love how this is the undercurrent of their squabbling.

Go, go, Soi Fong! And everyone else. (Nice that some things are going nearly according to plan...)

incandescens October 6 2010, 21:23:12 UTC

Noooooooooo commento. ;)

archangelbeth October 6 2010, 21:24:06 UTC

*can detect UKisms with the greatest of ease*
MUWHAHAHAHAH!

incandescens October 6 2010, 21:25:32 UTC

Indeed, some habits are harder to break than setting all my 's' to 'z' and my 'our' to 'or'. ;)

Thread 9

incandescens October 6 2010, 21:20:18 UTC

Excellent stuff. Lovely use of character, and it was just as it should be. I love your Kuukaku and Ganju and Soi Fong and Sasakibe.

liralen October 6 2010, 21:51:16 UTC

*hugs you happily*

Thank you so much. I'm very glad they were as they should be. *grins* They were fun to write.

mythic_fantasy October 6 2010, 22:56:54 UTC

This was great! Thank you!

But I have a question...isn't Ginrei no longer alive in cannon? Or did I make a mistake?

liralen October 6 2010, 23:18:53 UTC

It's kind of confusing! Ginrei was the 27th head of the Kuchiki Clan, but he stepped down to give Byakuya the position, he didn't die. He also was a former Captain, but again, instead of dying in the post, he stepped down.

He's actually in the sequence when Rukia is being adopted, in the whole of the Koga anime arc, and quite hale and alive at the end of it. So...I figure he's just seen Byakuya's father die, and in this AU Byakuya never came back from Hueco Mundo. Two generations lost to Shinigami duties. So...worn away seemed appropriate.

Thank you!

mei_yanohi October 7 2010, 01:46:31 UTC

Ah what an exciting, amazing, and (oh lord, dare I say it?) HOPE-INSPIRING chapter! Soi Fong is a total Valkyrie here, I love her grace, power, and determination, and you really gave Sasakibe's character a breath of life that I wish we'd get to see in canon. And dear god the dead cats hanging from wires was creepy as hell.

One edit:

the Chambers of the Central 42

Unless I'm forgetting something about Winter War canon, isn't it Central 46?

liralen October 7 2010, 05:33:02 UTC

You're correct. This is what I get for not writing Bleach fanfiction for over four months. *laughs and laughs* I just think I have these things off the top of my head. Thank you for the correction! Whew.

Yes! Hope! For *once*...though once things *look* like they're good...

I'm glad that you liked Soi Fong and Sasakibe having more than just a mustache and a foil he never gets to use... *laughs*

I have to credit sophiap for the idea of the cats. It was creepy enough I had to use it.