Road to Nowhere

[lionille]

Disclaimer: These characters ARE mine, baby. :)

Title: Road to Nowhere
Word count: 1500
A/N: Trying my hand at a chapter of original fiction here. Fantasy genre. This may or may not go any further, so I'm making no claim to it as a WIP. Just a try at something new.

Comments

[oddsbobs]

absolutely fantastic

for real

i am intrigued

hooked, if you will

♥

[lionille]

♥
Thank you SO much. You're really very kind to take the time to try an OF and to be encouraging, too. Thank you.

[oddsbobs]

hehe

Well, I figured it was written by you, so it had to be good...

lo and behold, I was right!

(seriously, you did a great job. you introduced a main character - giving him a personality in an impossibly few paragraphs - created conflict, a sense of other-worldliness, and most importantly, hinted at background and plot. all without going into too much detail or without being too subtle. excellent pacing for a novel, I believe. *hint hint*)

[lionille]

Wow, you know how to make a gal feel good, I'm grateful to get such great feedback!
*glances around nervously*
*opens up a word doc. to start Part II*

[koslorollo]

Wow! Way to go!

I agree with everythign oddsbobs said! It was a brilliant way to open a novel, without feeling like it was totally textbook. This is how you start a novel... You know the way I mean?

The caravan leader's great, his little quips, hehe. And your hero has some issues to take us through! Actually, I'm just interested in how he gets along with the elephant later on...

Ah, I'm really tired and becoming maddingly sleep-deprived. Pay no attention to that man behind the curtain....

*hugs* I'm so proud of you! :D Totally wasn't expecting to see anything original from you on the flist, and poofadoofadoo, there it was! Part two will come soon, yes?

[lionille]

poofadoofadoo
Best new word of the week! *holds it in hands*
Thank you so much for reading this, it's just something I've been playing around with. I'll make sure Jeslyn gets acquainted with the elephant, and the caravan leader keeps quipping. :D

[ireneadler]

Oh, wow. Just....yes to what everyone else said. I love fantasy, and this is unlike anything I've read. Can't wait to see how it progresses. Fantastic.

[lionille]

^^ Thank you very much for reading this! I was afraid of boring everyone with randomness, it was so encouraging to get such nice comments.
How are you doing these days? *frets*

[ireneadler]

From the comments, it looks like no one's bored! ♥

I'm doing okay. Lungs are clearer, I'm not coughing so much, and I went back to work on Tuesday. But I have ridiculously low energy and haven't made it through the day yet. On Tuesday and Thursday I spent half the day sleeping in the nurse's office, and got sent home early today and Wednesday. I don't feel awful, I'm just exhausted all the time. Even when I have no classes and spend the day sitting at my desk reading a book - it's ridiculous! I officially hate pneumonia. But you're so sweet for worrying. *hugs*

[lionille]

*hugs back* I am thinking about you. I can only guess how exhausted you must be trying to work. Glad the cough is easing up, though, that alone can wear you right out.

[a_bees_buzz]

Fantastic start! You've done a great job of creating both a setting and a setup, and given us an intriguing cast of characters. I'm hooked. Please share some details - is this the start of a short story or a novel? Are you planning to keep posting it here?

[lionille]

Thank you! I appreciate you taking a look at it so much! I don't know how long this will go along, but I might try to do a bit every day just for the exercise, and I will definitely post anything I finish on here. ^^

[secretsolitaire]

AND......? ;-) Yes, I'm hooked and looking forward to more! I like the idea of these permanently costumed people...

[lionille]

^^ Thank you! I'm just delighted that you opted to read it. I'm fiddling about with part two, whereupon intrepid hero wakes up in his new mask. :D