"Love hopes all things"--the 3900+ word version

[lilian_cho]

Warning: Not rewritten yet. So transitions between parts are choppy.

Title: Love hopes all things
Fandom: Harry Potter
Pairing: One-sided (?) Lily/Scorpius and Albus Severus/Scorpius. Shades of Harry/Draco.
Rating: PG-13 for pre-slash
Inspired by: toomuchplor’s "The Trouble with Love" and the movie Love Actually.
Author’s Note: I didn’t have time to make

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[gelsey]

He had of course known that Albus was good friends with Malfoy’s son from the moment they were both sorted into Slytherins ... He had, of course, known that ....

“Oh, I have my sources in the snake pit,” James said with what he sprobably thought was an enigmatic smile.
... what he probably ...

[lilian_cho]

Fixed! Thanks =D

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[lilian_cho]

Can you help fill this out pls?
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[somigliana]

Aw that's lovely.

Didn't notice any glaring mistakes.

And cutting too much would be a little bit like butchering it. I'd leave it as is :)

[lilian_cho]

Thanks =)

Will just trim it a bit then (if I have the time before midnight).

I just...can't justify writing a 4000+ words of people talking, talking, talking O_o

4K of fluff! >_

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[lilian_cho]

Can you help fill this out pls?
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[spiderstars]

This was adorable! It's definitely one of my favorite pieces of your writing actually. It's fluffy without being stupid or anything. And I love the way you write all the characters. Draco especially made me happy. Oh, and I loved how different Scorpius is from Draco. Makes me smile.

Uh, I wouldn't cut anything, but the most distracting thing I noticed were the way the transitions between scenes worked. Sometimes they seemed a bit choppy.

MSN

[lilian_cho]

=DDD

Can you get on MSN right now? Or are you turning in right now? It's almost 4 a.m. over there huh *g*

[lilian_cho]

It's definitely one of my favorite pieces of your writing actually.

YAY! \o/
What are the other ones? ;-)
"Dragon Dreams," I presume.

It's fluffy without being stupid or anything.

Great *g* I did hope the story doesn't sound brain dead ditzy.

And I love the way you write all the characters. Draco especially made me happy.

=D
20 years later, he's an indulgent parent, a lot more laid back and a lot less twitchy X-D

Oh, and I loved how different Scorpius is from Draco. Makes me smile.

Yay! \o/ He's such a sweet, innocent, clueless child. Too bad that won't stay the same, bwahahhaha. *evil author's laughter*

I'm in the process of writing 20 Things about him X-D
And I wrote a scene of him and Al in Sixth Year having their first fight.

This is Scorpius _Amaryllis_ Malfoy, btw.
I've also written Scorpius _Severus_ Malfoy (Su Li's son and has a younger sister in China) and will write Scorpius Hyperion Malfoy (Ravenclaw, ends up with Rose Weasley =P)

the most distracting thing I noticed were the way the transitions between

[summerslaughter]

This is so cute! I am way late, but I filled out the poll and, if you are still interested, here's my grammar corrections & thoughts.

It's fluffy, but it's not stupid or tooth rottingly sweet. There's some substance here as well, which I like. I thought the characterization was very good and I really like the interaction between Harry and Draco.

A few minor verb tense problems I noticed:

With every single letter that Lily wrote saying she miss her Mum

she missed her mum

Draco groaned. “Oh great. Next he would be pestering me to open a credit card account.”

Next he will be

He nudged Harry and smiled mischievously. “Bet you fifty galleons that he would come backhe will come back

Thank you! :-D

[lilian_cho]

Fixed almost everything!

This is so cute! I am way late, but I filled out the poll and, if you are still interested, here's my grammar corrections & thoughts.

<3 It's never too late to leave beta-y comments to me X-D
I'm definitely rewriting this fic to make the transitions go smoother, so probably it'll end up in the vicinity of 4500 words =P

Care to be my beta? Pls oh pls? *uses puppy eyes icon*

It's fluffy, but it's not stupid or tooth rottingly sweet. There's some substance here as well, which I like.

Awesome! Substance like...?

I thought the characterization was very good and I really like the interaction between Harry and Draco.

=DDD I'm surprised by how many people enjoy the H-D interaction. I set out writing about their children, I swear! But it ends up being Harry and Draco observing their children's relationships X-D

Yeah the longer I'm out of college the more past v. present tense problem I get, it seems =P

Also, I don't think you need the first section break. Since the scene doesn't actually change and the

Re: Thank you! :-D

[summerslaughter]

Care to be my beta?

I would be delighted. :)

Substance like...?

Sorry, I guess 'substance' isn't really very helpful or descriptive. What I mean is that there's more to this fic that just being cute & sweet. I've read a lot of fics that are basically just a giant pile of sugar and nothing else. This is fluffy, but there's an intelligent plot and realistic conflict. It's got a sugar coating, but it's not all sugar. XD

The characterization and interaction of the characters is really well done. It's also a plausible canon compliant fic. It's obvious that Harry and Draco have both grown and matured here. Harry is still reluctant to have the Malfoys in his home, but he's willing to put that aside for his children. Also, Harry and Draco don't seem completely comfortable with each other at first, but they bond over the children in a very natural way. I really liked that because it shows that you aren't just ignoring their past, but, 20 years later, it is their past and their children are more important to them.

Say, you don't happen to

Re: Thank you! :-D

[lilian_cho]

I added you on MSN but was too tired last night so I turned off my MSN immediately after ^^;;
(Usually I'm on like...half the day at least)

Yayayay beta \o/

What I mean is that there's more to this fic that just being cute & sweet.

I have succeeded! *g* Esp. considering this was not meant to be longer than 2000 words X-D All this plot and backstory just kept on creeping in!

there's an intelligent plot and realistic conflict.

Thank you =D
Hmm...by conflict are you referring to Al v. Lily (?) Or the fact that everyone's unhappy about Score's moving...or?

The characterization and interaction of the characters is really well done. It's also a plausible canon compliant fic. Yay! Oh, another thing I need is a beta who have actually read DH rotfl. I've only read the first five chapters and the epilogue (and spoilers and rants and summaries of course) =P

[kcstories]

Very sweet. :) I love how you characterised the kids, and the subtle H/D.

Oh, and I wouldn't cut anything either.

[lilian_cho]

Thank you =D