[Multi-Chapter] The Cut Sleeve: Chapter One

[lifeinthebox]

Title: The Cut Sleeve (Chapter One

Comments

[i_am_zan]

I don't know why ... maybe it's the weather, maybe its the fact that the birds are too loud outside and the sky is a November grey but I must have picked up the slightly melancholic yearning that Ohno is feeling and I must admit to being a little teary.

Having 'boku ga boku no subete' on a loop might have something to do with it too.

Lovely, beautiful writing. I think I am in love with it.

[lifeinthebox]

Thank you so much! ♥

I'm really flattered that it moved you that much. Hopefully the next chapter won't make you quite so melancholy, though. ;)

[tinahyena]

omg now i'm really excited about this fic. i loved how nino and ohno met again in the exact same way they had the first time

[lifeinthebox]

Wah! Thank you! I'm really glad you liked it! I was hoping it wouldn't be too abrupt a transition from the prologue to the first chapter with the time span in between and the backstory that hasn't been covered yet. ^^;

And yes, there will be more about Nino's move to the palace later on, along with a bit of backstory for some of the other characters as well. ;)

[tinahyena]

i didn't think it was abrupt at all. but then that's my opinion. when i read the first chapter the prologue just felt like nino was thinking about his life outside the walls as he was going to meet subaru to give him the money for his family. then you tie the prologue and the first chapter together so nicely by repeating that scene with ohno and nino just when they are older. Not giving the backstory keeps me interested and wanting to know more. i like trying to guess what happened.

i think it's fitting too cuz if you think about it, when nino met ohno as a child, that marked a change in his life because you mention that it's the last time he climbed over the wall. then now when nino meets ohno again, obviously something is going to change in there relationship otherwise you wouldn't have a story.

[coldbloodedfire]

OH I SEE YOU, POSTING YOUR EPIC!

You know I love this story to bits--and, like, everything else you write, really--but I felt like reinforcing it. ♥ 'Cause, y'know, I'm all about sharing the love.

And I'm really too braindead to say anything more than that, so just know that I'm here, rubbing my hands evilly and cackling and waiting for the next installment. ♥

[lifeinthebox]

AWHN, Thanks, you. ♥ ♥

Perhaps I might be able to actually pound out some Koyai (Aiyama?) while the creative juices are flowing. 8|

Also, I whole heartedly encourage you to continue your own evil endeavors. >8D

[coldbloodedfire]

Oh, oh god, yes, please! ;o; Just the thought of it cheers me up like nobody's business! Aaaah, woman! *rolls with you*

Ahaha, they're coming along slowly but surely? I really wanna work more on TCoPY but genki men in business suits keep distracting me. Damn you, genki men in business suits!

♥

[coldbloodedfire]

Haha, and obviously I fail at commenting correctly. DURR.

[lifeinthebox]

That's okay. XD You have seen my comment!fail time and time again. I won't judge you, bb! *rolls with you*

I MAY HAVE TO HAVE YOUR BABIES IF YOU WRITE MORE OF EITHER. JUST SAYING. 8D

[coldbloodedfire]

At least we fail together? XD ♥ *tumbletumble!*

BUT I THOUGHT I WAS HAVING YOUR BABIES FOR... ERR... SOMETHING OR OTHER! OH WELL. IF IT GETS MORE AMAZING STUFF WRITTEN, BABIES ALL AROUND! AND THEN WE CAN MAKE SHO BABYSIT THEM, MWAHAHAHA~

Also, why the hell am I not on AIM talking to you in realtime? Obviously this must be rectified! 8|

[ayumwu]

Surprisingly having the Qing dynasty as the backdrop suits the story. I don't really want to think about their HAIR though. XDDD

And YokoAiba, BFF forever! XDDDD

[lifeinthebox]

Thanks!! And I'm trying not to think about their hair myself, honestly. The Manchus had not the best of hairstyles, that's for sure... XD;

With their mutual love of nipples it was inevitable, really. 8|