Ficathon: Aftereffects, by Mikey, red cortina

[mikes_grrl]

Title: Aftereffects
Author: mikes_grrl
Rating: Red Cortina for violence
Pairing: gen (really!)
Warnings: Description of a child's attack and murder. It's a brief description, but still...thought I'd be honest and upfront here. And, ANGST.
Word Count: 3,000~
PROMPT: Sam-whumping, an uncomfortable meeting, a flat tire (for slashedsilver).
Summary: Sam never recovers.

Comments

[dakfinv]

This isn't fail. This is WIN. Epic, brilliant 100% WIN! I mean, it would have been win no matter what since it hits my Sam!thumping and crazy!PTSD!Sam kinks. But it just is so much more than that. I like the fact that Sam semi-recovered because I think it makes it more painful for Gene and the rest that he can no longer connect with him, even if he is out and about and living a semi-sort of life.

With the way you wrote the second half, from Sam's POV, you can just feel the disconnect with the world seeping through the page/screen. The moments Gene is there for make him more alive, but as soon as Gene's gone, it's back to his old, crazy ways.

Oh, Sammy.

(Can I, uhm, be the hippie girl who lives across from Sam? For, uhm, research purposes?)

[jean_geanie]

lol join the line! *adjusts hippie costume*

[mikes_grrl]

I figured I'd draw you in with the Sam!whumping. Glad it kept your interest after that! Thank you for the praise; Sam as semi-recovered is a less dramatic person and so was much more slippery of a catch, you know?

And who is to say I wasn't thinking of you when I wrote the Hippy Girl into the story? heheheh....

Thanks for the compliment and encouragement!

[andres00]

Oh, it's so sad, why you so dry? And sensitive too! Poor Sam, poor Gene, you so harsh to them!
Please change it slash, and make Gene save him!
Yeah, sorry, what did I say? I'm crap now, but this fic is really scary, as much as perfect. I can read cruel description of every torture, but this so lonely and desolate style broken my heart. I can picture the lone figure in the street very cleary.
It remined of some old french movie, they loved each other, but the love destroyed them, and they lived with the pain, the memory. I don't remember the title, and most of the movie, and I hope to forget this one too. Well, if only I can.
You like Law and Order, SVU? That's my best police drama, this fic reminded me of that too. Oh, just great.

[mikes_grrl]

LOL! No, Gene can't save him this time. Believe me, I feel your sorrow on THAT.

Thank you! I am so glad you liked it, even if it broke your heart. Like your story is doing to me! Turn about is fair play. heh.

Thanks for the wonderful compliments. *hugs*

[skywise012000]

I'll happily go along with what the others have said - this is fantastic!!

I did think that Gene just *happening* to have a flat tyre virtually right outside Sam's front door wasn't an accident - was it just an excuse for him to bump into Sam accidentally-on-purpose to see how he was getting on? I like to think so but then I'm a hopeless romantic LOL

As always you've written a beautifully painful piece of literature that is going straight in my mems so I can take it out and read it whenever I'm feeling melancholy.

Thanks

[mikes_grrl]

Somewhere in my head is the idea that Gene regularly drives through the neighborhood, hoping to see Sam, just to check up on him (actually that was part of the kudzu that got cut...a little too slashy, heh), but the flat was a genuine accident. Gene doesn't want Sam to know how much he still cares, actually. *reels back in from tanget*

Thank you! I'm glad that you found it beautiful, despite the painful aspects of Sam's situation. That makes be feel a lot better about the fic, overall. <3

[explodedpen]

Most definitely not made of fail. Completely and utterly made of wonderfully haunting and creepy win *nods*

Oh Sam

Bloody brilliant :)

[mikes_grrl]

Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it -- I appreciate your commenting, because it DOES make me feel better about it. <3

[time_testudinem]

I agree with all others posting here that this is NOT fail. I suppose that I can see some reasons why you might think so. It doesn't hang together with the seamlessness and flow of most of your stories. (perhaps that is scarring left over from the kudzu hacking) That said, the scene with Sam doing laundry was just so amazingly awesome that it puts this squarely in the WIN column. Plus you gave him the kind of TCG I have always wished he had, creepy but less overtly scary and hostile. I love it very much, your prompter is lucky.

[mikes_grrl]

Thank you! You nailed it, the flow of it is one of my biggest beefs, and yes, it started sprawling in an attempt to fix the flow, and then got cut because of the sprawling, which did NOT help the flow. *is cursed*

Nonetheless I'm glad you liked it. Thank you so much for the compliments!