Fic: Kiss, Just As Before

Jan 31, 2011 19:00

Title: Kiss, Just As Before
Authors: liebedance and museme87
Pairing: Lily/James
Rating: NC-17
Word Count: 1,996
Warnings: Non-magical AU, smut
Summary: It was supposed to be a one-night-stand, no-strings attached. But there's something about James that Lily can't help but connect with.
A/N: Thank you, Y, for the beta! And thank you, H, for being a brill co-author ( Read more... )

character: james potter, harry potter, pairing: lily/james, fanfiction, genre: romance, character: lily evans, rating: nc-17, genre: smut, oneshot

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ladielazarus February 1 2011, 04:02:49 UTC
<3

This was hot and wonderfully unexpected. I do love finding new Lily/James fic, and it's even better to enjoy an AU for a change. :)

Brilliant.

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liebesfic February 1 2011, 04:04:10 UTC
Oh, thank you very much :)

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ladielazarus February 1 2011, 04:06:02 UTC
No problem! I have to write a Lily/James fic yet for a pornbattle and I've been hunting for inspiration. :) This was helpful.

Oh! And also: my favourite bit was -- “This, we have to do. I’ll go mad otherwise.”

It felt so... James-esque. :)

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liebesfic February 1 2011, 04:07:31 UTC
I'm glad it was helpful/inspirational.

I definitely will want to read that L/J fic. There is not enough L/J smut out there.

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imagined_away February 3 2011, 03:06:01 UTC
Sex or no sex it has got to be freezing in her flat.

I like that Lily went for James in this fic and not the other way around.

I hope she's on some sort of birth control! (I'm sorry I always think this in fic for some reason)

This was goo.d I really liked how they both felt like they knew each other even when they didn't. You kept true to the characters :)

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bluealoe February 6 2011, 10:21:23 UTC
At first glance, I thought "What?" A non-magical AU where Lily and James meet at a club and hook up? Ooookay....
But somehow, you pulled it off. You captured the essence of their personalities, made them seem REAL even though everything around them has changed. And that is so damn hard to do. I salute you!

"Heater broke… should be fixed tomorrow."
*snorts* Have you been visiting my room?

“This, we have to do. I’ll go mad otherwise.”
That is SO James!!

That whole dialogue does a nice job of conveying urgency through short, clipped sentences.

Lily has never been a one-night stand kind of girl. But maybe tonight, with James, things will be different. It certainly can’t be any worse than what she’s experienced lately, and who can blame a girl for wanting to recreate herself?
Oh, Lily...I can completely understand the desire to recreate yourself.

Why does it feel like she’s done this before when they’ve only just met? Why is kissing James as easy and natural as breathing and more right than anything she’d done with anyone in the past? ( ... )

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gmariam March 1 2011, 00:33:15 UTC
Did you see the comment I left on muse87's post? I hope so! I really liked this fic. I came back because I'm working on something in the same third person/present tense and having trouble and remembered you writing in the same vein a bit. How do you keep it personal and emotional with that pov/tense combo? I'm just curious if it's something that comes naturally or if you've had to give it some thought.
And it is a J/L piece, if that makes a difference. ;)

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liebesfic March 1 2011, 00:47:34 UTC
I think that it mostly comes naturally to me. I think action verbs tend to help. You know, likeJames wishes the alcohol would work faster, wishes that he could just cast a memory charm on himself and forget the entire battle - the lights, the sounds, the blood and the death. But he knows that casting Obliviate on himself is too risky, and that he’ll fuck it up somehow. But trying to force himself to forget only makes the images come to his mind stronger and more clearly. And so he takes another drink. or And James is yelling now. He knows he shouldn't be, but he can't help it. It's as though something has taken over his brain and his forcing his thoughts outI think it really has to do a lot with getting into the characters; heads so that you understand their emotions, and then stepping back a bit. If that makes sense ( ... )

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gmariam March 1 2011, 01:44:16 UTC
Thank you so much! I may have to poke you a bit more, if you don't mind, but I'll be sure to do it in a message or something. I'm so glad I asked, though, because your fics really do have that urgency I'm looking for and your comments above really help! Thanks!! :)

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ravenread November 8 2011, 04:30:20 UTC
I love this. I just started reading fanfic again and I'm so pleased to have found this. As others have said it was so adorable and James' dialogue was just spot on. AU is also something I love. But I can't say I find a lot of good Lily/James AU. This is done really well.

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liebesfic November 8 2011, 05:17:35 UTC
I'm glad you loved this! I loved writing this. museme87 was so fun to write with, and it was fun to do the AU! Thanks for the lovely comment.

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