Breakable

[legal_larceny]

She sits alone, among the crowd

Comments

[xeilos]

Your writing is very good, dont doubt that. It's got a lot of directed emotion in it that brings the writing exactly to the point while opening up so much more without notice. I for one really like a lot of the stuff you wrote, including this poem here.

I've always wondered why we (me, you, anybody else who follows the trend) write poetry in third person almost instinctivly. Is it for the flow of things? For the illusion of faceless people? To take out context of our lives by refering to lifeless figures? To more easily get past insecurities in our subjects of writing? I just find it weird how we clearly are refering to ourselves, but at the same time remove our perspective to look from the outside in on another human figure.

[legal_larceny]

Its just eaier that way. Sometimes I write in first person, but thats so much more personal feeling. This way, I can pretend that everything I write is just nonsense, if I want to. Its a shield. I don't know about you, but I tend to write when I'm highly emotional. Usually when I'm pretty angry/upset/sad about something, just because anger and sadness are much more powerful emotions than contentment or simple pleasure. Not all of my poetry is sad or unhappy, but a lot of it is for that reason. Most people are at least a little self conscious about displaying that kind of raw emotion without some kind of defense or protection. Even if its just a completely transparent shield like writing in third person.

[legal_larceny]

(plus, every now and then people do write about entirely hypothetical situations)

[powerman5044]

Wow, That's beautiful Im very impressed. This is the best thing Iv read of yours by far. It flows so nicely and feels so light just like a song. Spectacular wording, one picture blossims into another.

[b_sharp522]

agree with both of them very well done i like it i like it

[legal_larceny]

thanks! :)

[legal_larceny]

Thank you. I write a lot. If you are interested, I have posted a few other poems on this. Check out entries from Feb 1st and 2nd, as well as Jan 26. The last one is my favorite, even though its really depressing. If you look at them, be sure to tell me what you think.