Fic Challenge #1: Bargaining, Part 1

[cordelianne]

Author: cordelianneTitle: If the Devil Come & Roar for Them

Comments

[lillianmorgan]

Ooooh that was really nice! Liked how you shifted from the dreamscape to the reality and how you blended aspects of the two together.
He wasn’t some ruddy white knight, he was bare and rotten. Not a man, not a hero; an empty shell.
Eeeee! So loaded with connotations of what's to come and what has passed.
“You four need to look up the meaning of ‘double date.’ Ever heard of dinner and a movie?” Spike asked. Harris was still standing there, his hands shoved in his pockets, eyes roaming the room.
Heeeee! And awwwwww ;) Great voices on both of them too.
Enjoyed that, thanks for submitting and good luck! :)

[cordelianne]

Thanks for your lovely comments! I'm pleased that the shift from the dream to reality worked for you. I'm also glad that the connotations with that "not a man" line came through.

I love writing Spike and Xander interactions, they just play off each other so well.

Thanks! :)

[ozma914]

Powerful -- great writing. A good view of Spike's inner conflicts.

[cordelianne]

Thanks for reading and for your encouraging comments! I'm very pleased that you found it powerful. :)

[zanthinegirl]

Very nicely done. Your Spike is complex and while he's clearly changing, he's definetely not "good". Which is exactly the way it should be at this point in the series IMO!

Like the conversation between Xander and Spike. It nicely fills in the blanks and sets up the later confrontaion . Very believable!

[cordelianne]

Thanks for your lovely comments! :)

Your Spike is complex and while he's clearly changing, he's definetely not "good". Which is exactly the way it should be at this point in the series IMO! I definitely agree with you that Spike shouldn't be "good" at this point in the series even though he's done a lot of good things. I'm very pleased that Spike's ambiguity came across, as it was something I really wanted to explore.

I'm glad that the Xander and Spike conversation worked, I love writing those two. I wanted their scene to set up their confrontation later, so I'm thrilled you think it does that. :)

[vampirefever]

Poor Spike, poor scoobies - all so sadly broken.
Good stuff :-)

[cordelianne]

Thanks for your nice comment! :)
The Scoobies are all sadly broken, and it only gets worse for them!

[kathyh]

I loved the way you showed the different aspects of Bargaining Spike here, torn between good and evil. Excellent writing. Thanks.

[cordelianne]

Thanks for your lovely comments! I'm pleased that the exploration of Spike's ambiguity worked for you. It definitely makes him an interesting character to explore. :)