Comments | ladyknightanka: [Teen Wolf Fic]: Flushed - PG-13

ladyknightanka

[Teen Wolf Fic]: Flushed - PG-13 - 2/20

Aug 10, 2012 15:33

A/N: I'm pleasantly surprised by everyone who's intimate with KKM and supportive of this fic. Thank you! I hope you continue enjoying it. I had a lot of fun with this particular chapter. :D

Title: Flushed
Disclaimer: I,

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fanfiction: multichapter, genre: slash, pairing: scott mccall/allison argent, pairing: derek hale/stiles stilinski, character: stiles stilinski, genre: total au, word count: 1000-4999, word count: 20000-49999, pairing: lydia martin/peter hale, fanfiction, character: jackson whittemore, fandom: teen wolf, pairing: jackson whittemore/isaac lahey

Comments 8

charlie_jae August 10 2012, 21:23:22 UTC

Loving how the story is going, I'm a huge AU fan. Can't wait to see what comes next.

icewormlj August 11 2012, 06:58:21 UTC

I love alternate universes but am an even bigger fan of stories that actually have a plot. This looks very promising. Find yourself a beta though. There are some rough spots that could use the application of some fine sand paper.

I'm looking forward to reading more stories in this universe.

ladyknightanka August 11 2012, 17:15:19 UTC

I also love alternate universes that are plot-heavy. :)

May I ask what you mean, though? Could you give me specific examples of 'rough spots'? I'm always open to critique, but that's rather vague, and vagueness doesn't really construe constructive criticism.

ETA: Thanks for your feedback, btw.

icewormlj August 12 2012, 05:11:44 UTC

Thanks for not being angry with me. Our stories are our babies and every one of them is exceptional.

There are two kinds of things that a Beta could have helped with:

Word choice: "He tries to shirk off Jackson's grip." If I were your Beta I would have asked if you didn't mean shrugged off. "Shirk" doesn't make sense.

Hasty proofing: "They lead straight behind her and end a few trees behind of him." "Of" is not needed.

Placing Stiles and all the Teen Wolf gang in a medieval, parallel universe is interesting and should make for some fun stories. The stories will be even more fun if your readers don't have to stop and wonder what you mean.

As I said, our stories are our babies; but like moms sending their kids off to school we want them to have their hair combed and their clothes clean. Writers need to do the same thing.

You're brave to ask for examples. Not many people would. I respect that.

emmyxogast August 11 2012, 09:33:49 UTC

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emmyxogast August 11 2012, 09:49:52 UTC

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rebornxlambo August 11 2012, 11:51:04 UTC

Yeeep, I've found the chapter interesting :D
I'm on the run, literally, so I'll just be very nice and wait for updates.

Pie-pie!

kiyomisa August 13 2012, 09:58:03 UTC

Ha ha, I never would have thought of mixing Teen Wolf and Kyo Kara Maoh. I'm really looking forward to see who you cast as who ^_~