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Time Left (#90 Countdown)

May 27, 2009 06:45

Title: Time Left
Author: ladygray99
Prompt: #90 Countdown
Word count: 100
Pairing: Charlie/Ian, David
Rating: PG13
Warning: none
Summary: One second left.
Notes: Written for numb3rs100, part of A Silk Pillow ‘verse. Honestly I'm not happy with this but it's the best out of a whole lot of garbage. If I can ever get the words flowing better I will rewrite it.
Beta: riverotter1951

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fandom: numb3rs, a silk pillow, character: david sinclair, pairing: charlie/ian, rating: pg13, 100's

Comments 4

quasardrake July 1 2009, 22:21:32 UTC

I like it but I do have a question. What do you mean here when you use the word "breach"? I seems you are referring to some form of memory or flashback, but that is not the understanding of the word I have...

Otherwise i think you did well with a difficult prompt.

ladygray99 July 2 2009, 03:26:39 UTC

I mean it as they are about to kick in a door with an armed team and Ian is kind of letting his mind wander just as they're about to go through. I really hate this drabble. I really need to re write it.

quasardrake July 2 2009, 19:17:40 UTC

Oh, I see. I kind of interpreted it as the meaning used when one says "a whale is breaching"; meaning that it is breaking the surface of the water and displaying itself before crashing under again. Cats will sometimes 'breach' - if you hold your hand above their heads they will rise up on just their hind legs and butt your hand with the tops of their head and shoulders before dropping back to their normal four legged stance. (I dunno - I and my household might be the only ones who call that breaching - from what whales do ( ... )

ladygray99 July 3 2009, 03:16:45 UTC

Well, thank you. Out of 215 this is the one that went through a billion rewrites and I'm still not happy with but I'm glad someone got it.