First Chapter

[lady_puck9999]

So, I have this Chapter One... I need someone to read it and say, "okay, this this and this are the things that I still don't know, and this is what is terribly wrong with it. Plz fix. Kthxbye."

So, anyone want to read a first chapter? It's like, 11 pages long. I will love you forever and ever and eeeeeveeeeer.

I will do a crit in return, too!

Comments

[pigeonchild]

I am probably not the best one for the job, but I am the first on the scene...

I'd love read it and throw my babbles at it if you want!

[lady_puck9999]

I RUV YOU!!!

It's on its way.