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Brigits Flame All Stars Entry - "Countdown"

Jan 31, 2010 22:35

Pushing the ale aside, she called out for hot water and pulled a satchel of herbs from her traveling pack, cursing to herself and the lean days that had brought her here. She tossed a black handful of her hair out of her face irritably. She'd never worked for so little-- especially with a wretched job like this.

The water came finally. Without ( Read more... )

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Comments 14

laguz_godin February 1 2010, 06:15:16 UTC

Wow. Gods. This is good!
Great job Jacques. Really. Tremendous.

-Leander

lacombe February 1 2010, 15:28:42 UTC

I'm glad you enjoyed it! What did you like about it?

laguz_godin February 2 2010, 01:07:38 UTC

I like how much I can see it happening in my head.
I like how they sound, speech wise.
I really, really like the message - the heart being a countdown and such. It seems really, truly thoughtful in a way that made me say "wow".

You.Are.A.Writer, Jacques.
:) This proves that.

-Leander

lacombe February 2 2010, 14:49:05 UTC

Aw, I'm glad you've enjoyed! It was ponderous. I'm just glad people even read all that.

desert_rose February 1 2010, 07:34:01 UTC

I'm finaly home, and am looking forward to taking this story to bed with me very soon!

I enjoyed the parts I read at work (shhhh) ;-) very much, and am looking forward to reading the whole story!

desert_rose February 1 2010, 09:13:34 UTC

Ok, now that I've been able to relax and read your story in its entirety, I have a few thoughts:

Lukado Luminesti."
I love his name- it's exotic, but also hints at a naughty fun side!
It just helps me remember that each heartbeat is too valuable to waste."
I said this in an e-mail, but I'm going to say it again. I love this line! His words are so true. Each heart beat is valuable and precious, and should not be taken for granted.

Babe, this is incredible! I'm glad you let your imagination run free, as you have produced another amazing piece of writing!

There's a part of you in all your characters, and especially in Lukado. Beneath his mysterious and magical exterior lurks someone romantic and sweet- all these traits you possess!

Wonderful writing, babe!

My fingers and whatever else I can cross are crossed for you this week!

lacombe February 1 2010, 19:07:14 UTC

Thank you, harmony! I have my fingers crossed, but after reading the others, I'm good with not winning the entire thing. There's a couple pieces this week that I think deserve it more.

cedarwolfsinger February 1 2010, 21:20:43 UTC

Lukado is a consummate smart ass! The Kumo is very interesting -- like various spider-monsters but different... Very well done, my friend.

lacombe February 1 2010, 22:10:39 UTC

;-) Yeah, I really had to dig deep to bring out Lukado's character. REALLY deep...

I like the Kumo. I wish I'd had more time to flesh all this out, through. There was much more to say.

desert_rose February 2 2010, 07:09:14 UTC

Would you do that at some point? I'd love it if you wrote more of this story!

It works excellently as it is, but I would still love more!

lacombe February 2 2010, 10:09:39 UTC

I could say yes, but the truth is that I probably won't. We'll have to see.

Thread 5

Part One toxic_apiaceae February 8 2010, 00:34:40 UTC

Hey, Jacques! Sorry this is getting to you so late. Anyway, you know how I do it … so let’s do it! *winks ( ... )

Part Two toxic_apiaceae February 8 2010, 00:35:06 UTC

[At the far end, two enormous iron doors hung battered and broken on their hinges- each one at least three hundred feet tall ( ... )