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Exchange Fic #17: Power Play

Oct 06, 2011 02:08

The actual identity of the writer will remain secret until all the submissions are in and posted.

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Title: Power Play
Author: themsmine
Recipient: sisterthemoon
Prompt: How much does Toby remember about his time in the Labyrinth? How does that affect him as he gets older? Does he end up accidentally summoning goblins to the middle of a Jr. High biology class, or ( Read more... )

ludo, sir didymus, romance, jareth/sarah, toby, humor, original characters, wordcount: 5 to 10k, hoggle

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anonymous October 6 2011, 18:43:18 UTC

I am so relieved that you liked it! I was so stressed out wondering if you would.

After reading your Dear Mystery Author post, I really wanted to give you that Underground Hockey League, and once I had my mind set on that, the question became how in the world do I "write" hockey. I watched a lot of Mighty Ducks this summer. ;)

And I had no idea what Red Dwarf was. I watched a few shows and then realized there was no way I'd be able to write the characters accurately by the deadline, if ever. But I thought I'd toss in a little reference, just for you. :)

It makes me smile that it made you smile. :)

slobber_neck October 6 2011, 12:32:17 UTC

That was incredibly well-written! The details of winter and hockey...I'm shivering just reading it! Very well done!

themsmine October 25 2011, 02:34:09 UTC

Thank you! I had to paste a picture of a wintery forest scene on my computer, crank the AC, and turn the lights down to make the words cooperate. Those 100+ degree days were just not cutting it. ;)

ex_misplace October 6 2011, 22:17:11 UTC

That was incredibly well-written. Wow. The creepy imagery in the beginning was fun, made me wonder what kind of Jareth we would be introduced to.

And I love Toby. Toby stories make me happy, especially when he inadvertently gets Jareth and Sarah together.

Now, Sarah and Jareth. Oh, your Jareth is smoldering. Perfect. I love that Sarah is feisty. And then the UST. Good grief, THE UST. So smexy!! My favorite moment, I think, had to be this one:

Excellent," he said, walking toward her. Just as he reached her side, he paused. "In case it wasn't clear, I intend to win and I play for keeps." He leaned in closer, his breath fanning over her ear. "And, Sarah...call me Jareth, hmm?" His shoulder brushed hers as he passed, two fingers slipping beneath the band of her mitten. She sucked in a breath as they stroked lightly up the inside of her wrist. Her own fingers curled at the feel of his skin against hers, her lashes drifting downwards.I love how you handle the sexy-as-hellness of their interactions without it being over-the-top (or ( ... )

themsmine October 25 2011, 02:35:56 UTC

Oh, you're too kind. But thank you! :)

And you guessed right - you already know me. ;)

wizzcat01 October 6 2011, 23:35:06 UTC

Oh I really love this!

Such a sweet story, funny and perfectly written. The game reminded me a little of the football match from Bedknobs and Broomsticks, I could just picture the goblins cheating.

The Red Dwarf reference made me laugh too. And the Jareth and Sarah interaction was just yummy.

In short, I loved it. VERY well done!

themsmine October 25 2011, 02:37:36 UTC

Thanks! I glad you liked it. :) It has been probably 20 years since I've seen Bedknobs & Broomsticks. I'll have to put it on the rewatch list.

I'm glad someone else caught the Red Dwarf reference. :)

dmacabre October 8 2011, 06:43:28 UTC

Hee, sports and Labyrinth, two things that normally don't go together! Great job, and I especially liked seeing such an independent Toby as well as the minor characters.

themsmine October 25 2011, 02:38:29 UTC

Thanks! I had to struggle to make hockey and Labyrinth work together. That was tough!