Biting the Bullet

[kyichu]

With the bottle pressed to my lips, I tilt back my head and bite the bullet. Cool liquid slides down my throat; bittersweet as it fills me and ebs away my pain. I hear more screaming, more angry cries.

I hear the sound before I feel the pain; her skin meeting mine harshly. I fall to the ground without making a noise. The bottle tumbles from my hand

Comments

[kyichu]

Thanks :)

[ordinaryxday]

That was wonderful.
Sad, but amazingly wonderful.

Loved it a lot.

[kyichu]

Thanks, I'm glad you loved it!
I was wondering how this one would go over...

[snoopyscenester]

H'oh-lee-shitbox that was intense. I love all the short, snappy sentences that are great for creating tension, and you sure as Hell did just that. Angst is good in the morning ^-^

[kyichu]

Thanks :)
I was hoping I'd be able to create that sort of tension, I'm glad I could accomplish it
Angst does have a good feel to it in the morning, doesn't it?

[yknow_fuck]

I love the wording and the phrases that were used.
Loved it.
:)

[kyichu]

Thank you! Glad you loved it!

[dragon013]

@.@ (watery eyes)
That was so sad... At first I thought Adie was doing that and I was like, WOA MAN. WHAT UP? XD
But poor Mikey...
Interesting twist.
Good job...
-J X

[kyichu]

Oh God, I don't think I could ever make Adie really do that...she's grown on me, I must admit. I just can't help but adore that woman.
I'm really glad you liked the story, and thanks for the comment :)