Because what he knows - what he’s certain of like he’s been certain of very little else in his life - is that Fai cares about him just as much as he cares about Fai. If he’d just stop pretending for a second, and admit it to himself. It’s torture. Wonderful, breathtaking, relentless torture, and he’s starting to suspect that he wouldn’t give it up for the world. And they torture each other to madness, to freedom, this day and every day that is to come.
I went back and read those three lines together, because they tie together so well they feel like a stanza cut from a poem. I enjoyed the story a lot. It has lyrical flow that expressed the shared longings very well, and the ending gave it a warm softness as those longings where given their answer.
fgshgfjkhg Thank you so much <3. Now that life finally has laid off me properly and I am not working constant night shifts at work, I finally have time to read your corresponding entry \o/ Imma just run off and do that now /hugssss/
Oh, I don't know if you don't get any scoring? It would be a shame, this is a good fanfic. I'll score anyway. 1. 9/10 Not "merciless" per se, but it's fluff, so… 2. 8/10 Good Fluff vibes 3. 7.5/10 Short and efficient, that was sweet.
This was absolutely fantastic. I especially liked the theme you picked for this story, "courage to surrender" is really something that both of them need to make this relationship work. (Probably something people need to make any kind of relationship work, but I see it in both of them, especially.) And I'm in love your beautiful writing -- I'm really, honestly glad to have you in the fandom!
I'm sorry to hear that things irl are crazy, right now -- I really hope things work out for you, even while I'm selfishly happy that you still managed to write and post for the olympics!
(And I really hope that somehow the scores for this fic can be used! It's be such a shame... >__<)
I have this huge ridiculous grin on right now, you wouldn't believe ^^ Since I thought the title was rather suitable for them, I'm really glad someone else thought so too and that I wasn't just bullshitting myself. Also fgsdhgfjksghjf ;A; /hugs forever and always/
Well, shit has finally let up properly now, and I feel like I can go back into the fandom, which I have missed sorely ^^
8 I like how you did both of their prospectives and I wish you had given us a little more detail to the merciless part. ;) 8 9 I really liked the end, it's not often you read fics with Kurogane being speechless by Fai being sexy. lol
Okay, so I read this and asdfghjkl;kjshgdfghjks is all I can think right now. /beyond thrilled you actually posted this
They torture each other, of course they do and it's just so right, and do not even get me started on that ending, because aggressive, dominant, I-have-everything-I-never-knew-I-wanted Fai is just hnnnng
/cuddles you/
I don't know if you'll still get scored or not, but I hope you do cause this was awesome :D
Ahem. Hi there. I'm alive again? And you are the sweetest ever and I feel like a jerkwad for not having replied earlier. /smacks self/ BUT THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR BEING ADORABLEST <3<3<3
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It’s torture. Wonderful, breathtaking, relentless torture, and he’s starting to suspect that he wouldn’t give it up for the world.
And they torture each other to madness, to freedom, this day and every day that is to come.
I went back and read those three lines together, because they tie together so well they feel like a stanza cut from a poem. I enjoyed the story a lot. It has lyrical flow that expressed the shared longings very well, and the ending gave it a warm softness as those longings where given their answer.
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1. 9/10 Not "merciless" per se, but it's fluff, so…
2. 8/10 Good Fluff vibes
3. 7.5/10 Short and efficient, that was sweet.
Final score: 8/10
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I'm sorry to hear that things irl are crazy, right now -- I really hope things work out for you, even while I'm selfishly happy that you still managed to write and post for the olympics!
(And I really hope that somehow the scores for this fic can be used! It's be such a shame... >__<)
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Well, shit has finally let up properly now, and I feel like I can go back into the fandom, which I have missed sorely ^^
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9 I really liked the end, it's not often you read fics with Kurogane being speechless by Fai being sexy. lol
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(I haven't even read this yet lol, I just wanted to say congrats for getting it up even after being royally bitch-slapped by RL :D)
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They torture each other, of course they do and it's just so right, and do not even get me started on that ending, because aggressive, dominant, I-have-everything-I-never-knew-I-wanted Fai is just hnnnng
/cuddles you/
I don't know if you'll still get scored or not, but I hope you do cause this was awesome :D
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1. 9
2. 9
3. 10 ♥
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Ahem. Hi there. I'm alive again? And you are the sweetest ever and I feel like a jerkwad for not having replied earlier. /smacks self/ BUT THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR BEING ADORABLEST <3<3<3
...also, yes. Dominant Fai. Yes.
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