Comments | kramskii: To give a title is to need a title

kramskii

To give a title is to need a title

Feb 04, 2011 22:39

Prompt: Overheard Dialogue
Community: your_scribbles
Title: A day in the life
Rating: PG-13
Fandom: Reborn!
Warnings: Fluff, probable OOCness for Fran
Authors Notes: So, I haven't done fanfiction in some time. I mean, I know I just posted something for KH recently on my page here but, I guess I just felt like this was a Fran moment. Anyways, for those ( Read more... )

oocness, rated: pg-13, story, genre: fanfiction, smile, happy, fran, kaiden, katekyo hitman reborn, prompt, fanfiction, f

Comments 2

writing2death February 5 2011, 14:56:51 UTC

Hi! I don't know the fandom but I liked this! :)

If you were wanting concrit, I'd mention that there were times that the tense changed during the story (like here: He replies, his voice was monotone.) and that some of your dialogue wasn't closed properly (like here: "Clearly." He replies, should be: "Clearly," he replies,) But feel free to ignore that :)

Are you looking for a title? If you are, I'll think on it. I'm terrible with titles :(

Thanks for filling the prompt! I really like it :D

kramskii February 6 2011, 09:08:35 UTC

I know you don't know the fandom. Though I think you would really like it.

Huh, you don;t always notice these things once reading/writing it. Though usually I just give it a once over and post it because at that point I'm too tired to care. Like now. I'm not sure what you mean by not closed properly. Explain in some more detail?

No, I wasn't looking for a title. though, I am looking for one for my KH story. And yes, it is a story. It legit-ly has three chapters so far. I don't think you are terrible at titles, they just aren't your strong suit. :)

And your welcome.